1、读后续写示例与写作训练1【写作示例】【原文呈现】 阅读下面短文，根据所给情节进行续写，使之构成一个完整的故事。A man came home from work late again, tired andirritated, to find his 5-year old son waiting for him at the door. Daddy, may I ask you a question?Yeah, sure, what is it? replied the man.Daddy, how much money do you make an hour?Thats none of you
2、r business. What makes you ask such a thing? the man said angrily.I just want to know. Please tell me, how much do you make an hour? pleaded the little boy.If you must know, I make $20.00 an hour.Oh, the little boy replied, head bowed.Looking up, he said, Daddy, may I borrow $10.00 please?The father
3、 wasfurious. If the only reason you wanted to know how much money I make is just so you can borrow some to buy a silly toy or some other nonsense, then you march yourself straight to your room and go to bed. Think about why youre being so selfish. I work long, hard hours everyday and dont have time
4、for such childish games.The little boy quietly went to his room and shut the door. The man sat down and started to get even madder about the little boys questioning. How dare he ask such questions only to get some money. After an hour or so, the man had calmed down, and started to think he may have
5、been a little hard on his son. Maybe there was something he really needed to buy with that $10.00 and he really didnt ask for money very often. The man went to the door of the little boys room and opened the door.Are you asleep son? he asked.No daddy, Im awake, replied the boy.Ive been thinking, may
6、 be I was too hard on you earlier, said the man.Its been a long day and I took myout on you. Heres that $10.00 you asked for.The little boy sat straight up,beaming. Oh, thank you daddy he yelled.注意：1. 所续写短文的词数应为150左右；2. 应使用5个以上短文标有下划线的关键词语；3. 续写部分分为两段，每段的开头语已为你写好；4. 续写完成后，请用下划线标出你所使用的关键词。Paragraph 1
7、:Then, the little boy reaching under his pillow_Paragraph 2:After hearing what the boy said, the man felt so sorry for what he had said to his son._【思维路径】核心内容 文本主要内容为：一位父亲工作很晚回到家，他5岁的儿子问他工作一个小时多少钱并向他借10美元。父亲对此很生气并朝儿子发了火。事后，父亲仔细思考后觉得儿子可能有所困难才开的口，所以最后还是借了钱。写作思路(1)明确故事人物关系(characters)。故事中主要人物为父亲the man
8、和他5岁的儿子the little boy。(2)理清故事主要事件(events)。父亲工作很晚回到家；儿子问父亲工作一个小时多少钱并向他借10美元；父亲为此生了气并叫儿子回自己房间反思；父亲考虑后觉得儿子事出有因便最后借了这10美元给儿子。(3)根据已知人物、事件及续写段落首句预测故事发展(development)。故事总体的发展应该是儿子用他借的10美元和自己已有的零用钱买了父亲一个小时的时间，此件事情让父亲反思自己以前花太少的时间陪儿子了。续写第一段：根据第二段开头提示的句子，小男孩接下来的行为让父亲感到惭愧。所以可能是小男孩拿着借的钱给父亲买了份礼物，也可能是小男孩拿着向父亲借的钱和自
9、己已有的钱买了父亲一个小时的时间。续写第二段：父亲为自己说过的话感到抱歉，可以写父亲之后用实际行动来弥补儿子，也可以写父亲开始反思以前太把重心放在工作上，而忽略了应多花点时间陪陪儿子。(4)结合下划线词罗列写作要点(points)。结合下划线词和文本内容，展开尽可能丰富的想象，罗列出尽可能多的故事发展情节。例如，第一段可以通过问以下问题来获取写作要点：”What would the boy do after he got fathers $10.00? Would he just buy a silly toy or some other nonsense for himself just l
10、ike what his father said? Would he do something special to his father?”等。第二段可以问以下问题来获取写作要点：”How would the father feel after hearing what the boy said? What would the father do? What changes would the father make? ”等。参考范文Then, the little boy reaching under his pillow, he pulled out some moreupbills.
11、The man, seeing that the boy already had money, started to get angry again. He grumbled why the boy wanted more money even if he already had some. The little boy slowly counted out his money, then looked up at the man. Because I didnt have enough, but now I do, the little boy replied, Daddy, I have
12、$20.00 now. Can I buy an hour of your time?After hearing what the boy said, the man felt so sorry for what he had said to his son. Tears filled his eyes and he gave a deep hug to the son. In the past few years, he was always engaged in work and never spent a single weekend with his son. This $20.00
13、is just a shortto all of us working so hard for our living. Dont let time slip through our fingers without having spent some quality time with those who really matter to us.(除给定词外，169 words)范文解析范文围绕文章的内容进行了合情合理的拓展。根据第二段开头提示，小男孩一定做了让父亲很感动的举动。因此小男孩借到钱以后，加上自己已有的零用钱向父亲买了他一个小时的时间。父亲听到儿子的话后，十分感动和抱歉，对自己以前的
14、行为有较大的感触，并进行了反思。最后两句从全文的角度进行概括，突出故事的主题。提炼归纳 1. 合理拓展情节读后续写首先要读通给定文本，把握故事的人物和事件。在此基础上根据提示对故事的发展作出合情合理又合乎逻辑的预测。为了将预测过程显性化，可以通过设问的方式，将预测重点以问题的方式显示出来，以利后续写作时的信息整理和语言组织。在该练习中，通过两段开头给的提示进行合理的推断，并通过事先设问的方式构思文章。两段分别以小男孩和父亲为主人公进行不同角度的叙述，符合故事发展的合理结局。2. 有效运用连接手段在具体的写作过程中我们要对罗列的要点进行筛选和整合，还要考虑写作要点之间连接手段(connectiv
15、es)的有效运用，例如范文中我们用了after来说明事件的先后顺序，in the past few years来转接过去情况的描述，because来引出小男孩借钱的原因。这些连接词的使用可以使文本读上去更有逻辑感，也使文章更加紧凑连贯。【写作演练】1.阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。续写的词数应为150左右。Brownie and Harry were neighbor dogs in Stowe, a beautiful and peaceful town in Lamoille County, Vermont, United States, who
16、 met everyday to play together, running after each other joyfully. Like pairs of dogs you can find in most any neighborhood, these two loved each other and played together so often that they had worn a path through the grass of the field between their respective houses.One evening, Brownies family n
17、oticed that Brownie hadnt returned home as usual. They went looking for him with no success. Brownie still didnt show up the next day, and, despite their efforts to find him, by the next week he was still missing.Curiously, the other dog, Harry, showed up at Brownies house alone one day. He barked,
18、jumped and pestered(纠缠) Brownies human family, showing that he was filled with anxiety. Busy with their own lives, the family just ignored the nervous little neighbor dog and decided to let the missing dog go.Harry refused to take “no” for an answer. Ted, Brownies owner, was steadily disturbed by th
19、e angry, determined little dog. One morning Harry followed Ted about, barking more insistently, then rushing toward a nearby empty lot and back, as if to say, “Follow me, please!Is very urgent!”Eventually, Ted went after the mad Harry across the empty lot as Harry paused to race back and bark encour
20、agingly. The little dog led the man under a tree, past some tree jungles, to a lonely spot a half mile from the house. There Ted found his beloved Brownie, and he was alive, with one of his front legs falling into a steel trap. At that moment, Ted understood the strange behavior of Harry. Feeling re
21、gretful, Ted now wished he had taken Harrys earlier appeals seriously. However, Harry had done more than simply led Brownies human owner to his trapped friend. Ted noticed something quite remarkable before him and was shocked that the amount of love that the dog has for his partner could be so outst
22、anding.Paragraph 1:In a circle around the injured dog, there were some remains of meals._Paragraph 2:Brownie was saved and taken home by his owner Ted._2. 阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。续写的词数应为150左右。A funny thing happened to Arthur when he was on the way to work one day. As he walked along Par
23、k Avenue near the First National Bank, he heard the sound of someone trying to start a car. He tried again and again but couldnt get the car moving. Arthur turned and looked inside at the face of a young man who looked worried. Arthur stopped and asked, “It looks like youve got a problem,” Arthur sa
24、id.“Im afraid so. Im in a big hurry and I cant start my car.”“Is there something I can do to help?” Arthur asked. The young man looked at the two suitcases in the back seat and then said, “Thanks. If youre sure it wouldnt be too much trouble, you could help me get these suitcases into a taxi.”“No tr
25、ouble at all. Id be glad to help.”The young man got out and took one of the suitcases from the back seat. After placing it on the ground, he turned to get the other one. Just as Arthur picked up the first suitcase and started walking, he heard the long loud noise of an alarm.It was from the bank. Th
26、ere had been a robbery (抢劫)!Park Avenue had been quiet a moment before. Now the air was filled with the sound of the alarm and the shouts of people running from all directions. Cars stopped and the passengers joined the crowd in front of the bank. People asked each other, “What happened?” But everyo
27、ne had a different answer.Arthur, still carrying the suitcase, turned to look at the bank and walked right into the young woman in front of him.She looked at the suitcase and then at him. Arthur was surprised. “Why is she looking at me like that?” He thought. “The suitcase! She thinks Im the bank th
28、ief!”Arthur looked around at the crowd of people. He became frightened, and without another thought, he started to run.注意：1. 所续写短文的词数应为150左右；2. 应使用5个以上短文中标有下划线的关键词语；3. 续写部分分为两段，每段的开头语已为你写好；4. 续写完成后，请用下划线标出你所使用的关键词语。Paragraph 1:As he was running, Arthur heard the young man shouting behind, “Stop, sto
29、p!”_Paragraph 2:The taxi stopped in front of the Police Station and Arthur_3.阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。续写的词数应为150左右。From the first day he entered my classroom, Willard P. Frank existed in his own world, shutting out his classmates and me. My attempts at building a friendly relationship wi
30、th him were met with complete indifference. I could see that his classmates fared no better. Willard was strictly a loner who seemed to have no desire or need to break his silence.Shortly after the Thanksgiving holiday, we received word of the annual Christmas collection of money for the less fortun
31、ate people in our school district. “Christmas is a season of giving,” I told my students. “There are a few students in the school who might not have a happy holiday season. By contributing to our Christmas collection, you will help buy food, clothing and toys for these needy people. We will start th
32、e collection tomorrow.”When I called for the contributions the next day, I discovered that almost everyone had forgotten except for Willard P. Frank. The boy dug deep into his pants pockets as he walked slowly to my desk. Carefully, he dropped two quarters into the small container. “I dont need milk
33、 for lunch,” he mumbled. For a moment, just a moment, he smiled. Then he turned and walked back to his desk.That night, after school, I took our few contributions to the school principal. I couldnt help sharing the incident that had taken place. “I may be wrong, but I believe Willard might be gettin
34、g ready to become a part of the world around him,” I told the principal. “Yes.” he nodded. “And we might do well to have him share a bit of his world with us. I just received a list of the poor families in our school who most need help through the Christmas collection. Here, take a look at it.” As I
35、 gazed down to read, I discovered Willard P. Frank and his family were the top names on the list. Seeing this, I decided to do something for him.Paragraph 1：On that Sunday, I paid a visit to Willards family. Paragraph 2：The next day, I had a special class for Willard. 4.阅读下面短文，根据所给情节进行续写，使之构成一个完整故事。
36、续写的词数应为150词左右。The big Town Hall clock was striking midnight when Frank began to cross the bridge. The dark night air was cold and a little wet, and the street lamp gave little light. Frank was anxious to get home and his footsteps rang loudly on the silent night.When he reached the middle of the bri
37、dge, he thought he could hear someone coming near behind him. He looked back but could see no one. However , the sound continued and Frank began to walk more quickly. Then he slowed down again , thinking there was nothing to fear in a town as quiet as this.Just then , he heard short , quick steps cl
38、osely behind him. By the time he reached the other side of the bridge , he could almost feel someone at his heels. He turned round and there stood a man in a large coat. A hat was pulled down over his eyes and very little of his face could be seen.Frank said something about the weather in an effort
39、to be friendly. The man did not answer but asked roughly where Oakfield House was. Frank pointed to a big house in the distance and the stranger continued his way.Then Frank wondered why the stranger had wanted to find Oakfield House at such an hour. He knew that the people who lived there were very
40、 rich. Almost without realizing what he was doing , he began following the stranger quickly.The man was soon outside the house and Frank saw him look up at the windows. A light was still on and the man waited until it went out. When about half an hour had passed, Frank saw him climb noiselessly over
41、 the wall and heard him drop on the ground at the other side.Paragraph 1:Now Frank knew what the man wanted to do._Paragraph 2:Frank couldnt just stand in the dark and wait._5.阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。续写的词数应为150左右。Throughout life, we come across many people who impact us in a way. The pe
42、rson who left a great impact on me is my dad.Three months after turning fourteen, my life was great. I was getting settled into a high school; my grades were already starting off greatly and I was making friends. One day as I came home from school, I walked into our living room, finding my mom and d
43、ad talking. My parents turned to me and told me to sit down because there was something important they had to tell me. I soon found out that my dads liver (肝脏) was failing and he needed an immediate transplant. I was shocked and confused. He was working and never looked sick. My parents told me not
44、to worry because everything would be fine. Four months had passed and my dad still had not received a new liver; he was progressively getting worse. His body seemed to be getting weaker, but he constantly said he was fine.It was getting hard for my family and me. My dad had to quit his job leaving m
45、y mom to be the only provider. I had to take on the responsibility of cleaning the house, cooking meals and checking on my dad while my mom was at work. I had to cut back on hanging with my friends because my dad was beginning to go in and out of the hospital. My focus for school was starting to slip. So were my
