1、读后续写示例与写作训练4【写作示例】【原文呈现】阅读下面短文，根据所给情节进行续写，使之构成一个完整的故事。Arriving in Sydney on his own from India, my husband , Rashid, stayed in a hotel for a short time while looking for a house for me and our children as we would go there when he made everything settled.During the first week of his stay, he went ou
2、t oneto do some shopping. He almost got lost in those unfamiliar blocks. When he came back in the late afternoon, he discovered that his suitcase was gone. He was extremely worried as the suitcase had all his important papers, including his passport.For a while, he was overwhelmed with depression wi
3、th no one to turn to. He reported the case to the police and then sat there，lost and lonely in a strange, thinking of the terrible troubles of getting all the paperwork organized againa distant country while trying to settle down in a new one.Late in the evening, the phone rang. It was a stranger. H
4、e was trying to pronounce my husbands name and was asking him a lot of questions. Then he said they had found a pile of papers in their trash can(垃圾桶)that had been left out on the footpath.My husband rushed to their home to find a kind family holding allpapers and documents. Their young daughter had
5、 gone to the trash can and found a pile of unfamiliar papers. Her parents had carefully sorted them out, although they had found mainly foreign addresses onof the documents. Atthey had seen a half-written letter in the pile in which my husband had given his new telenumber to a friend.My husband was
6、so excited about the return of the suitcase. Meanwhile, the kindness of this family made him feel that this place could be a new start, a new home for a brand new life.注意：1. 所续写短文的词数应为150左右；2. 应使用5个以上短文标有下划线的关键词语；3. 续写部分分为两段，每段的开头语已为你写好；4. 续写完成后，请用下划线标出你所使用的关键词。Paragraph 1:In order to thank this fam
7、ily,_Paragraph 2: A few weeks later, my children and I arrived in Sydney._【思维路径】核心内容 文本主要内容为：主人公Rashid来到陌生的城市悉尼，打算找房子开始他的新生活。然而他的手提箱却意外丢失，包括里面所有的重要文件，他向警方报案，在这座陌生城市他感到孤独和无助。幸运的是，最后手提箱被一个善良的家庭捡到，并顺利回到Rashid手中。写作思路(1)明确故事人物关系(characters)。故事中主要人物为Rashid，捡到旅行箱的热心家庭。(2)理清故事主要事件(events)。Rashid来到陌生城市准备找房子安
8、顿下来；结果意外丢失其重要的旅行箱；旅行箱被当地一户善良的人家捡到，失而复得。(3)根据已知人物、事件及续写段落首句预测故事发展(development)。故事总体的发展应该是主人公Rashid为了表示对这户家庭的感谢晚上请他们一家在餐馆吃饭，同时也聊到了Rashid的经历以及在陌生城市的迷惘和无助。这户人家在知道了Rashid的事情之后，决定帮助Rashid找房子，同时帮助他熟悉街区，一来一往之后，Rashid和他们成为了挚友。几个星期之后，Rashid的妻子和孩子也来到了悉尼，他们的房子已经定下来，开启了他们人生的一段新旅程。(4)结合下划线词罗列写作要点(points)。结合下划线词和文
9、本内容，展开尽可能丰富的想象，罗列出尽可能多的故事发展情节。例如，第一段可以通过问以下问题来获取写作要点“According to the story, what would Rashid do to thank this family? How could he find his house?等”第二段可以问以下问题来获取写作要点：“What would happen when Rashids family came to Sydney? Would they have a new life in this unfamiliar city, why?等”参考范文In order to tha
10、nk this family, Rashid invited them to a dinner in a nearby restaurant. Rashid told them he was a newcomer in this city and wanted to find a house to settle down here waiting for his family to join him. “When I found out that my suitcase was missing, I was disappointed and hopeless. Thank you sincer
11、ely for your help. What a timely assistance for me! ” Rashid said. This family could have chosen to ignore this suitcase. However, they didnt. They found out the owner out of their kindness and turned this trash into a treasure. “You are welcome, Rashid. I heard that there are some houses for sale i
12、n my neighborhood. I can show you around, if youre interested.” Again, thanks to this kind family, Rashid found a sweet home. A few weeks later, my children and I arrived in Sydney. My husband had prepared a new home for us surrounded by kind neighbors. Though the beginning of the story was filled w
13、ith terrible troubles, it worked out perfectly in the end. This family let us feel the warmth from this unfamiliar city. A small kindness can indeed make a difference.(除给定词外，160 words)范文解析 范文围绕文章的内容进行了合情合理的拓展。根据故事发展的线索，范文第一段将续写Rashid为了回报这个家庭的善举请他们在餐馆里。于是Rashid向他们叙说了自己的处境，而捡到手提箱的家庭又一次帮助Rashid找到了住处。第二
14、段，Rashid的家人来到悉尼，而此时，Rashid已经安顿好了一切，虽然这个城市对他们来说仍旧陌生，但是他们相信这是一个值得安家定居的地方因为当地人的善行。在故事的最后，再一次点名主题。提炼归纳 1. 合理拓展情节读后续写首先要读通给定文本，把握故事的人物和事件。在此基础上根据提示对故事的发展作出合情合理又合乎逻辑的预测。为了将预测过程显性化，可以通过设问的方式，将预测重点以问题的方式显示出来，以利后续写作时的信息整理和语言组织。在该练习中，我们通过4个问题来拓展并整理自己的写作思路，这4个问题以Rashid以及其家人为表达的主体，问题之间有一定的逻辑联系，符合故事发展的合理结局。2. 有效
15、运用连接手段在具体的写作过程中我们要对罗列的要点进行筛选和整合，还要考虑写作要点之间连接手段(connectives)的有效运用，例如范文中我们用了However，though来说明事件的转折，again表示Rashid再一次对这户家庭的感谢。这些连接词的使用可以使文本更加紧凑连贯。【写作演练】1.阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。续写的词数应为150左右。I lay on my bed, legs leaning against the wall, desperately wishing my mother would call. But I reme
16、mbered the last time Id seen her, right before the train for Providence pulled out of the station, “You know how expensive it is to call,” she said, then hugged me tight and said good- bye.This was my first birthday away from home. I missed my mom, missed my sister, and most certainly missed the spe
17、cial pound cake my mother always made for my birthday. Since getting to college that year, I would watch jealously as the other freshmen received care packages from their parents on their birthdays-and even on ordinary days. Big boxes containing summer slacks and blouses, packages of M&Ms and Snicke
18、rs , things they needed and things they didnt. Instead of feeling thrilled about my upcoming eighteenth birthday, I felt empty. I wished my mom would send me something, too, but I knew that she couldnt afford presents or the postage. She had done her best with my sister and me-raising us by herself.
19、 The simple truth was there just was never enough money.But that didnt stop her from filling us with dreams. “You can be anything you want to be,” she would tell us. “Politicians, dancers, writers - you just have to work for it; you have to get an education.”Thanks to my moms sacrifices and big drea
20、ms, Id made it to the Ivy League: Brown University in Providence, Rhode Island.As I was recalling these things, my roommate joined me on the bed. “Hey. After we study, lets buy ice cream and cake.” I nodded, closed my eyes, and imagined the cake Mom would have made. Mmm. I could see the golden yello
21、w of each of the twelve eggs, and I could almost smell the vanilla(香草) filling the house while the cake baked.注意：1.所续写短文的词数应为150左右；2.续写部分分为两段，每段的开头语已为你写好；Paragraph 1As I daydreamed, there was a knock on the door._Paragraph 2How had she managed to afford it? _2.阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。续写
22、的词数应为150左右。Mr. Plumbean lived on a street where all the houses were the same. He liked it that way. So did everybody else on Mr. Plumbeans street. Then one day a seagull flew over Mr. Plumbeans house and made a big orange splot(斑块) on Mr. Plumbeans house.“Oh! Too bad!” everybody said. “Mr. Plumbean
23、will have to paint his house again.”So Mr. Plumbean got some blue paint and some white paint, and that night he got busy. He painted at night because it was cooler. When the paint was gone, the roof was blue. The walls were white. And the big orange splot was still there. Then he got some more paint
24、. He got red paint, yellow paint, green paint, and purple paint.In the morning the other people on the street came out of their houses. Their houses were all the same. But Mr. Plumbeans house was like a rainbow. It was like a jungle. It was like an explosion. There was the big orange splot. And ther
25、e were little orange splots. There were stripes. There were pictures of elephants and lions and pretty girls and steam-shovels. That day Mr. Plumbean bought carpenters tools. That night he built a tower on top of his roof, and he painted a clock on the tower.At night the next day Mr. Plumbean got a
26、truck full of green things. He planted palm trees, baobabs , bushes, and onions. When the other people came out of their houses, they saw Mr. Plumbean swinging between two palm trees and Mr. Plumbean was drinking lemonade.Plumbean has gone too far! “Plumbean, what have you done to your house?” the p
27、eople shouted.“My house is me and I am it. My house is where I like to be and it looks like all my dreams,” Mr. Plumbean said.The people went away. They asked the man who lived next door to Mr. Plumbean to go and have a talk with him. Tell him that we all liked it here before he changed his house. T
28、ell him that his house has to be the same as ours so we can have a neat street.注意：1.所续写短文的词数应为150左右；2.续写部分分为两段，每段的开头语已为你写好。Paragraph 1The man went to see Mr. Plumbean that evening._Paragraph 2Then, one by one, they went to see Mr. Plumbean, late at night. _3.阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。续写的词
29、数应为150左右。I had been swimming competitively for five years and was ready to quit because I felt I was horrible at it. I was often the only African American at a swimming competition. I kept receiving “Honourable Mentions”. Any athlete knows that you dont want to have a bookshelf full of “Honourable M
30、entions”, which you get just because you showed up.One summer day, the day before a big swim meet, I decided to break the news to my grandma that I was quitting the swim team. When I told her of my desire to quit swimming, she looked me into my face, saying firmly but warmly, “Baby, remember these w
31、ords Quitters never win and winners never quit. Your grandmother didnt raise losers or quitters. You go to that meet tomorrow, and you swim like you are a grandchild of mine, you hear?” I was too afraid to say anything but “Yes, maam.” The next day we arrived at the swim meet late, missing my group
32、of swimmers in the 15/16 age group. My coach insisted I be allowed to swim with the older group. I knew she was including me in the race so our long drive would not be wasted, and she had no expectations whatsoever that I would come in anything but eighth place and only that because there were not n
33、ine lanes.As I was mounting the board, all the other girls looked at me. I quickly noticed that these girls were here to do one thingbeat me! All of a sudden my grandmas words rang in my head：“Quitters never win and winners never quit. You swim like you are a grandchild of mine. Quitters never win a
34、nd winners never quit.” “Yes, grandma, I will swim like I am a grandchild of yours, ” I said to myself.Paragraph 1：SPLASH! I was swimming harder than Id ever swum before._Paragraph 2：Just then, cheers and claps overwhelmed me._4.阅读下面材料, 根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段, 使之构成一篇完整的短文, 续写的词数应为150左右。Mike licked the la
35、st of the mint chocolate chip ice cream. It was almost time to leave. He jumped into the car with his parents and headed off to the Olympic-sized pool for the big swim meet.When his race came up, Mike was confident. He was strong and swift. Mike climbed out the pool, smiling. He had just won first p
36、lace, making him the fastest boy in his age group.“Congratulations, son, “ his father said. His mom gave him a hug, even though he was soaking wet.A week later, it was time for another swim meet. Like before, Mike decided to enjoy his favorite ice cream flavor. Mike remembered that the last time he
37、had won a race, he also ate mint chocolate chip ice cream first. Maybe hed win again.He took first place again in his race. Mike was feeling pretty good. As it turned out, Mike decided to have mint chocolate chip ice cream before every one of the next few swim meets. He began to think of it as his l
38、ucky charm. After several mouths of placing in the top positions of every race he swam, Mike was feeling unbeatable. And he wouldnt admit it, but all that ice cream was adding a few pounds to his athletic swimmers build.It didnt take long after that for Mike to start coming in second place-and then
39、third-and then last place in his races. The lucky mint chocolate chip ice cream had lost its magic.On the day of his next swim meet, his mother sat down at the table with him. “Mike, we all love ice cream, bu its not healthy for your body to eat so much of it. Maybe its time to quit the sweet treats
40、 for a while, especially before you go swimming.”Mike unwillingly agreed. He went to the swim meet, and didnt perform well. His father offered to go running with him a few days a week to help him feel better and strengthen his muscles. The extra weight soon disappeared, and Mike found himself breath
41、ing easier at swim practices.Paragraph 1: It was the last meet of the season, and Mike wasnt sure what to expect._Paragraph 2Finally came the end of the race._5.阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整 的短文。I would like to share an act of kindness, which I practice regularly and which gives me great joy. I
42、always carry at least $ 10 in my car and also in my pocket. I save it for the first person who asks if I can “spare some change. Smiling at the person, I always respond very cheerfully with a comment like, “Yes, I would love to.” or “It would be my pleasure. “ And I give them the money. Then I repla
43、ce it with my next $ 10 for the next person. I never spend this money myself. I think that it is the possession of the next person who asks for it. Ten dollars is a small amount, yet it means a lot to the person who expects it, especially when delivered with joy and respect to them.I also have taken to carrying things in my car, such as hats, socks, gloves and umbrellas, just in case someone needs them. Recently I put together some care packages for the homeless. It occurred to me that things like band-a
