1、读后续写示例与写作训练2【写作示例】【原文呈现】阅读下面短文，根据所给情节进行续写，使之构成一个完整的故事。Jenny was a bright-eyed, pretty five-year-old girl.One day when she and her mother were checking out at the grocery store(杂货店), Jenny saw a plasticnecklace which was priced at $2.50. How she wanted that necklace, and when she asked her mother if
2、she would buy it for her, her mother said, Well, it is a pretty necklace, but it costs an awful lot of money. Ill tell you what. Ill buy you the necklace, and when we get home we can make up a list of chores that you can do to pay for the necklace. And dont forget that for your birthday Grandma just
3、 might give you a whole dollar bill, too. Okay? Jenny agreed happily, and her mother bought the pearl necklace for her.Jenny worked on her chores very hard every day, and sure enough, her grandma gave her a brand-new dollar bill for her birthday. Soon Jenny had paid off the. How Jenny loved those pe
4、arls! She wore them everywhere to kindergarten, bed and even when she went out with her mother to run.The only time she didnt wear them was in the shower, because her mother had told her that they would turn her neck green!Jenny had a very loving daddy. When Jenny went to bed, he would get up from h
5、is favorite chair every night and read Jenny her favorite story.One night when he finished the story, he asked Jenny, Hey, sweetie, do you love me?Oh yes, Daddy, you know I love you, the little girl said with a warm smile.Well, then, give me your pearls.Oh! Daddy, not my pearls! Jenny refused. But y
6、ou can have, my favorite doll. Remember her? You gave her to me last year for my birthday. And you can have her tea party, too. Okay?Oh no, darling, thats okay.Her father brushed her cheek with a kiss. Good night, little one.注意：1. 所续写短文的词数应为150左右；2. 应使用5个以上短文标有下划线的关键词语；3. 续写部分分为两段，每段的开头语已为你写好；4. 续写完
7、成后，请用下划线标出你所使用的关键词。Paragraph 1:A week later, Jennys father once again asked Jenny the same question after her story._Paragraph 2: Another week later, when her father came in to read her a story as usual._【思维路径】核心内容 文本主要内容为：Jenny和她妈妈经过一家杂货店的时候看见一串塑料珍珠项链，她非常喜欢，于是就要求妈妈买给她并且答应了帮妈妈做家务的方式来赚取项链钱的要求。Jenny很快
8、就赚到了足够的钱。Jenny的爸爸非常爱她，有一天晚上，爸爸问她愿不愿意将项链送给他，但是Jenny拒绝了。写作思路(1)明确故事人物关系(characters)。故事中主要人物为小女孩Jenny，Jenny的妈妈(mother)，Jenny的外婆(Grandma)和Jenny的爸爸(father,daddy)。(2)理清故事主要事件(events)。Jenny和妈妈路过一家杂货店；Jenny看重一条塑料珍珠项链；Jenny答应妈妈买项链而提出的要求；Jenny每天做家务很快赚到了足够的钱；Jenny爸爸向她要这串项链，但是Jenny拒绝了。(3)根据已知人物、事件及续写段落首句预测故事发展(
9、development)。故事总体的发展应该是Jenny通过再三考虑几番抉择，最后还是把珍珠项链给了爸爸，没想到正因为如此却意外收获了一份更加珍贵的礼物。续写第一段：一周后，Jenny的爸爸再次问了Jenny相同的问题，可能是Jenny同意了将心爱的珍珠项链送给爸爸，也可能是Jenny还是不愿意将项链送给爸爸。但是根据续写第二段开头的提示，可能Jenny拒绝了爸爸这种可能性更符合逻辑一点。续写第二段：有续写第一段的内容作为铺垫，此段的发展可能是Jenny仍然不同意将项链给爸爸，也可能是她将项链送给了爸爸，若是这种可能，则还可以在此基础上描写一些爸爸的反应，如礼尚往来，给了Jenny其他的礼物作
10、为回报等。(4)结合下划线词罗列写作要点(points)。结合下划线词和文本内容，展开尽可能丰富的想象，罗列出尽可能多的故事发展情节。例如，第一段可以通过问以下问题来获取写作要点“What did Jenny response to fathers question? Did she give the pearls to father or just refuse again? What did the father do after Jennys answer?等”第二段可以问以下问题来获取写作要点：“What did the father do this time? Did he stil
11、l ask the same question? Did Jenny give the pearls to her father at last? If so, what did her father do and how did he feel?等”。参考范文A week later, Jennys father once again asked Jenny the same question after her story, Do you love me? Jenny gave a definite answer to this question without hesitation. B
12、ut when the conversation came to whether she could give her pearls to her father, she refused a second time.Another week later, when her father came in to read her a story as usual, Jenny was sitting on her bed and her lip was trembling. Here, Daddy, she said, and held out her hand. Inside of her ha
13、nd was her beloved plastic pearl necklace. She let it slip into her fathers hand. At this time, her father pulled out of his pocket a bluebox, and some real, genuine, beautiful pearls were just inside. He had had them all along. He was waiting for Jenny to give up the cheap stuff so he could give he
14、r the real thing. Sometimes, life is just like this: give up one thing and get another chance to receive a better thing.(除给定词外，164 words)范文解析 范文围绕文章的内容进行了合情合理的拓展。续写两个段落开头给出句子中写了两次爸爸晚上给Jenny讲故事，提示可能性最大的情景发展应该是有两次类似的针对愿不愿意给珍珠项链的交谈。因此，第一段写了爸爸再次问Jenny愿不愿意给项链，然而这次Jenny仍然不愿意给。第二段，如果再次写Jenny不愿意给的话文章主题就很难得到
15、升华，因此这段中，我们将主动权转交到Jenny身上，Jenny主动将项链给了爸爸，并且父亲相应的给了她一条真的珍珠项链。最后一句话是根据这个小故事而得出的关于人生的一个小道理，从而在文章结尾处点出文章主题。提炼归纳 1. 合理拓展情节读后续写首先要读通给定文本，把握故事的人物和事件。在此基础上根据每段续写开头的提示对故事的发展作出合情合理又合乎逻辑的预测。为了将预测过程显性化，可以通过设问的方式，将预测重点以问题的方式显示出来，以利后续写作时的信息整理和语言组织。在开始写范文前，我们首先用7个问题来构思整个文章的发展。通过对这7个问题的可能回答的排列组合，挑选出最符合逻辑的情节发展。同时，为了
16、提升整个范文的情感目标，可以使结局适当出人意料及令人深思一点。本范文在第二段时转换了与原文相反的基调，突出了小女孩在这件事情中的主动性与转变，使得范文更有层次感。2. 紧密联系原文内容续写是在原文内容的基础上进一步对接下来发展情节的预测和描写。因此，续写的内容必须与原文紧密相关。可以在情节上承接原文，也可以用特定的细节，如人物，地点，事件等来呼应原文。如在本范文中用a second time来呼应原文中Jenny第一次拒绝爸爸的要求。3. 有效运用连接手段在具体的写作过程中我们要对罗列的要点进行筛选和整合，还要考虑写作要点之间连接手段(connectives)的有效运用，例如范文中我们用了a
17、week later和another week later来说明事件的时间顺序，用but来表示转折，用so来表因果关系。这些连接词的使用可以使文本更加紧凑连贯。【写作演练】1.阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。续写的词数应为150左右。Sally had anxiety disorder trouble that made her fail to speak in social situations. Im a nurse and use Bella to help children in my community, to bring them comf
18、ort and confidence the way only a dog can. I thought back to the day when Id first brought Bella to the school.That morning in January, her teacher led us to a room. “Sally hasnt spoken outside her home in two years,” she told me. “Her parents have taken her to doctors, but nothing has worked. ” A l
19、ittle girl stood shyly just inside the doorway. Her eyes brightened when she noticed my dog.“This is Bella.” I said. “She does tricks. Would you like to see?”Sally nodded. I motioned with my hand. Bella lay down and then rolled over. Sallys eyes lit up. I showed Sally the hand signals for various co
20、mmands. She was a natural with Bella, maybe because she couldnt rely on the spoken word herself. Bella sensed that and responded. Soon Sally was able to put Bella through her paces all on her own. I could see her standing taller, more sure of herself each time we met.One morning in March when she wa
21、s working with Bella, I heard a tiny voice, barely a whisper, “Good dog. Sally didnt take her eyes off Bella, but I wanted to jump for joy. Sally spoke a little more each week, only to Bella at first, but then to me. Later, she started giving voice commands with her hand signals and her confidence r
22、ose.Now, five-year-old Sally stood nervously in front of her kindergarten class, with Bella, my trained dog, sitting calmly by her side. All the eyes of her classmates were focused on Sally. They were waiting for her to speak. It was Juneonly one week of school leftbut they had never heard her voice
23、. Not once.Paragraph 1:But not a word came out. Sally had been so excited about putting on a dog show for her class. Paragraph 2:The next week, she told me she wanted to try again, looking up at me with determination. 2.阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。续写的词数应为150左右。A dawning sun shaped the massi
24、ve form of the train. Loaded with fuel, water, and sand for power, the lead train weighed in at 410,000 pounds. Conductor Robert, 49, ran his eye along the 96 cars behind him.It was 7 a.m. Robert had already checked the list of dangerous materials aboard the train. Weve got some gas with us, hed rep
25、orted to his engineer, Lindley, in the cab (驾驶室). The presence of gas would mean taking extra care when braking the 6,200-ton train. With explosive gas on board, an accident would be more dangerous. After a final external inspection, Robert jumped aboard. Slowly the train pulled out of the station.R
26、obert and Lindley had 50 years of railroading experience between them. They approached Lafayette at about 1:45 p. m. and slowed the train to the speed limit. Lindley turned on his flashing lights and warning bell. The two had been through the city hundreds of times, but they grew extra cautious roun
27、ding the first curve (弯道). Ahead, over just three miles of track, lay no fewer than 24 street crossings. As the train came out of the curve, Lindley noticed a small dot on the right rail about 150 yards ahead. He thought it might be a dog. Now, as the train approached within 100 yards of the object
28、on the rail, Robert looked attentively. Then shock coursed through him.My God! he yelled as a tiny face turned toward him. Its a baby!Lindley had an instant decision to make, applying full emergency brakes with half the train still wrapped around a curve. He had to risk an emergency stop. Robert ope
29、ned the left door of the engine cab quickly and stepped out onto a narrow walkway. He hurried to the front of the engine and crossed to the right side. He then stepped down to the lower portion of the walkway just to the back of the trains cow catcher.Paragraph 1:Stretching as far as he could, Rober
30、t put his right leg out in front of him._Paragraph 2:Telling himself he still had a job to do, Robert went back to check on the cars. _3.阅读下面短文，根据所给情节进行续写，使之构成一个完整的故事。Missus Sommers one day found herself the unexpected owner of fifteen dollars. It seemed to her a very large amount of money. For a da
31、y or two she walked around in a dreamy state as she thought about her choices. Her daughter Janie was wearing worn shoes and needed new ones. She would buy cloth for new shirts for the boys. Her daughter Mag should have another dress. And still there would be enough left for new stockings for her ch
32、ildren. The idea about how to spend the dollars made her restless with excitement.On the day she planned to go shopping with the money, she ate a light meal- no! Between getting the children fed and the house cleaned, and preparing herself to go shopping, she forgot to eat at all!When she arrived at
33、 the large department store, she spotted a pile of silk stockings at the entrance. A sign nearby announced that they had been reduced in price a young girl behind the counter asked her if she wished to examine the silky leg coverings. She smiled as if she had been asked to inspect diamond jewelry, a
34、nd started to feel the soft, expensive items. Missus Sommers picked up a black pair and looked at them closely. Two red marks suddenly showed on her pale face. She looked up at the shop girl and said proudly, “Well, I will buy this pair.”Missus Sommers changed her cotton stockings for the new silk o
35、nes in the ladies rest area. She had let herself be controlled by some machine-like force that directed her actions and freed her of responsibility. How good was the touch of the silk on her skin! Then she put her shoes back on and put her old stockings into her bag. Next, she went to the shoe depar
36、tment, where she tried on a pair of new boots. Her foot and ankle looked lovely. She could not believe that they were a part of herself.注意：1.所续写短文的词数应为150左右；2.至少使用5个短文中标有下划线的关键词语；3.续写部分分为两段，每段的开头语已为你写好；4.续写完成后，请用下划线标出你所使用的关键词语。Paragraph 1：After buying a pair of new boots, she walked into the clothin
37、g department._Paragraph 2：She was about to leave the store when a kid running around reminded her of something._4.阅读下面短文，根据所给情节进行续写，使之构成一个完整的故事。A farmer grew some vegetables in his garden. One day his wife was ill and he had no money. He had to sell some cabbages and carrots in the market. The next
38、morning he took two baskets of vegetables to town. But it was snowing hard that afternoon and there were few people in the street. When his vegetables were sold out, it was dark. He bought some medicine and hurried to his village. On his way home he saw a person lying on the snow. He placed his bask
39、ets on the ground and was going to help the person to get up. At that time he found it was a dead man and there was much blood on his body. He was so afraid that he ran away quickly, without taking the baskets with him. The next afternoon the farmer was sent to the police station. Having shown the b
40、askets, an officer asked, “Are these yours?” “Yes, sir,” the farmer answered timidly. “Have you killed the man?” “No, no, sir,” the farmer said in a hurry. When did you see the dead man? “About seven last evening.” Did you see who killed the man? No, sir. The officer brought out a knife and asked, H
41、ave you seen it before?” No, sir. The officer became angry and told the policeman to beat him up and sent him into prison, He wanted to trap the farmer into the confession(供认), but the farmer didnt admit he was the murderer. 注意：1. 所续写的短文词数应为150左右；2. 应使用5个以上短文中标有下划线的关键词语；3. 续写部分分为两段，每段的开头语已经为你写好；4. 续
42、写完成后，请用下划线标出你所使用的关键词语。. Paragraph 1:The officer was so angry that he asked the policeman to beat him up again._Paragraph 2: The farmer was lucky. A few days later,_5.阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文，续写的词数应为150左右。Last Sunday afternoon, Sandra and I were eager to meet up with a man on Detroits eas
43、t side to help him get ready for a job interview this week. But on the way, we spotted a dog lying near the road next to his owner. We thought hed been hit by a car. My friend, Sandra Abrahamian and I, had assisted animal rescue groups before and we thought there might be something we could do, so w
44、e quickly pulled over to help.His owner, a woman told us the dogs name is Bosco, and she was walking him over a mile in the heat to her new home. She said Bosco was an outside dog and no one would give him a ride to her new place. Thats when she and a friend decided to walk the entire way. He was going from a life on a chain in one backyard to another. She sai
