1、读后续写示例与写作训练7【写作示例】【原文呈现】阅读下面短文，根据所给情节进行续写，使之构成一个完整的故事。Tringg-Tringggggg! Anna rolled in bed hoping the ringing would stop. When she eventually answered, her maid was calling to inform she wouldnt come as usual, as rains had flooded her house. Unhappy, Anna slid back under the quilt, wishing she also
2、 could stay in. Having moved to the city few months back, Anna lived alone and worked with an advertising firm. Assisting her colleague Mary on a presentation for a rich customer Mr. John, Anna worked rather hard. However, the fact that she wasnt part of the team handling the deal was highly dishear
3、tening. Reaching for the bedside clock, she woke up hurriedly. 8:00 am the red figure glared back. Damn! Late AGAIN! Taking a quick shower, she rushed to the bus-stop. She had barely stepped out when downpour caught her in the middle. Blaming the rains, she made her way through the crowd when she sp
4、otted her bus leaving. She ran after it but lost her balance and her purse contents spilled out. Frustratingly looking up towards heaven, Anna sighed. Stuffing her purse, she decided to take a taxi. Attempting to hail an empty taxi for 20 minutes, Anna paced restlessly, when someone pulled at her. A
5、 young beggar girl was vying for attention. Anna shrugged her off, assuming the girl wanted money. However, the girl held out her hand holding Annas mobile, which Anna left behind when she dropped her bag. Embarrassed at her insensitivity, Anna offered her chocolate for appreciation, which the girl
6、grabbed quickly. The prize lighting up her face, she joined her companions, playing in the rains with joy. Annas heart soared seeing the poor children treasure the little things. Half-hour later, Anna stepped into her office which to no surprise wore a deserted look. Before she could reach her desk,
7、 Chris was walking towards her. “ Meeting with John now! Mary is not in because of water logging in here, we will go ahead”, Chris ordered seriously. Shocked yet excited at the development, Anna followed. Post the meeting, Chris announced that staff should leave instantly as thunderstorms were predi
8、cted. 注意：1. 所续写短文的词数应为150左右；2. 应使用5个以上短文标有下划线的关键词语；3. 续写部分分为两段，每段的开头语已为你写好；4. 续写完成后，请用下划线标出你所使用的关键词。Paragraph 1:After an eventful day, Anna reached home, hungry and exhausted._Paragraph 2: Lost in thought, Anna looked back on the events of the day._【思维路径】核心内容 文本主要内容为：一大早，Anna诸事不顺：女佣因大雨不能来做家务；上班时错过了公
9、交车；追赶公交车时摔了一跤；打的迟迟等不到车。但幸运的是，手机失而复得、工作出现了转机 写作思路(1)明确故事人物关系(characters)。公司职员Anna、Anna的女佣、Ann的同事Mary、上司Chris、大客户Mr. John、捡到她手机的乞丐。(2)理清故事主要事件(events)。下雨天女佣请假，Anna上班错过了公交车，追赶公交车时摔了一跤，等出租车久候不至，乞丐送回了捡到的手机，上班后因同事请假意外地被委以重任。(3)根据已知人物、事件及续写段落首句预测故事发展(development)。故事总体的发展应该是Anna下班后又累又饿，但是因为女佣请假只能拖着疲惫的身躯继续做家
10、务。然而在做家务的过程中，她渐渐地体会到了其中的乐趣。做完家务她开始看电视，意外地看到了她早上错过的公交车出事故的新闻。回想这一天发生的事，Anna体会到了塞翁失马焉知非福的道理。续写第一段：Anna刚回家时心不甘情不愿地烧饭烧菜搞卫生。然而，她一边干家务一边感受渐渐感受到了做家务时的宁静和愉悦，上班带来的身心疲惫得到了缓解。带着这样的心情，她开始看电视，却吃惊地看到原本她要坐的公交车发生了车祸。续写第二段：Anna回想这一天所有的事情，才发现有时候坏运气也会带来好的结果。如果女仆不请假，她不会体验到做家务带来的简单的快乐；如果她赶上了公交车，会遭遇车祸；如果她及时打到了出租车，她的手机就丢了
11、；如果不是因为大雨同事Mary没来上班，她就无法得到上司的重用。可见，塞翁失马，焉知非福等。(4)结合下划线词罗列写作要点(points)结合下划线词和文本内容，展开尽可能丰富的想象，罗列出尽可能多的故事发展情节。例如，第一段可以通过问以下问题来获取写作要点：“What did Anna do at home? How did she feel at first? Did something unexpected happen to her again?等”。 第二段可以问以下问题来获取写作要点：“How did she think her maids absence? What would
12、happen if she caught the bus? Was it a coincidence for her to get her mobile back? What does this story intend to convey?等”。参考范文After an eventful day, Anna reached home, hungry and exhausted. The moment she came in, she saw a messy house. “Why is the universe out to get me?” she screamed, taking on
13、the boring tasks of cooking and cleaning. After a while, Anna realized she was enjoying herself and the “me-time” made her refreshed. Coffee for company, she settled to catch the news. Disturbing images of a minor accident were being broadcast. Annas heart sank when she figured that it was the bus t
14、hat she had missed. Lost in thought, Anna looked back on the events of the day. Had the maid showed up, Anna wouldnt have the chance to appreciate lifes simple joys. If she caught the taxi earlier, she wouldnt have got her mobile back. Had it not been incessantly raining, Mary would attend the meeti
15、ng instead of Anna. Overcome with a strange feeling that the universe was sort of looking after her, Anna smiled, closed her eyes, said a small thank you to GOD and promised to look more carefully for the tiny bright spot in every gloom and be more patient in understanding lifes hidden meaning. When
16、 one door closes, another opens. 范文解析 范文围绕文章的内容进行了合情合理的拓展。前面的文本出现了很多的转折，因此，第一段延续这种内容的设定，写了Anna对做家务前后心态的变化，结合上文的伏笔，引出本文一个高潮：原本Anna要搭乘的公交车出事故了。第二段的目的在于通过Anna对这一天的反思，对全文进行概括，突出故事的主题。提炼归纳 1. 把握内在线索好的故事往往上下文呼应，所谓“草蛇灰线，伏脉千里”。因此，要做好文本的续写一定要读懂给定文本，把握故事的人物和事件，抓住内在的线索。只有做到这一点，才能对故事的发展作出合情合理又合乎逻辑的预测。要做好本篇的读后续写
17、，必须发现文本中的几组对比：Anna等了很久的出租车非常郁闷，然而因为她一直在原地等车，导致她能找回原本丢失的手机；下大雨上班让Anna狼狈不堪，然而正因为恶劣的天气同事请假，使她得到了上司的重用。所以，续写要按照这一模式创造更多的意料之外、情理之中的巧合，强化文章要表达的真正目的。2. 学会运用排比在写作过程中，我们要根据文本特点选择相应的写作手法。在第二段的续写中，Anna回顾一天中发生的众多事情，而这些事情都有意想不到的后续，根据这一内容，采取排比句的方式不仅能让读者一目了然，而且在气势上造成强化的效果。【写作演练】1.阅读下面短文，根据所给情节进行续写，使之构成一个完整的故事。Sall
18、y had anxiety disorder trouble that made her fail to speak in social situations. Im a nurse and use Bella to help children in my community, to bring them comfort and confidence the way only a dog can. I thought back to the day when Id first brought Bella to the school.That morning in January, her te
19、acher led us to a room. “Sally hasnt spoken outside her home in two years,” she told me. “Her parents have taken her to doctors, but nothing has worked.” A little girl stood shyly just inside the doorway. Her eyes brightened when she noticed my dog.“This is Bella.” I said. “She does tricks. Would yo
20、u like to see?”Sally nodded. I motioned with my hand. Bella lay down and then rolled over. Sallys eyes lit up. I showed Sally the hand signals for various commands. She was a natural with Bella, maybe because she couldnt rely on the spoken word herself. Bella sensed that and responded. Soon Sally wa
21、s able to put Bella through her paces all on her own. I could see her standing taller, more sure of herself each time we met.One morning in March when she was working with Bella, I heard a tiny voice, barely a whisper, “Good dog.” Sally didnt take her eyes off Bella, but I wanted to jump for joy. Sa
22、lly spoke a little more each week, only to Bella at first, but then to me. Later, she started giving voice commands with her hand signals and her confidence rose.Now, five-year-old Sally stood nervously in front of her kindergarten class, with Bella, my trained dog, sitting calmly by her side. All t
23、he eyes of her classmates were focused on Sally. They were waiting for her to speak. It was Juneonly one week of school leftbut they had never heard her voice. Not once.2.阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。续写的词数应为150左右。An old wooden seat that Susan extremely valued often reminded her of mothers Go
24、lden Rule.Back in the 1930s, the country life was really tough. One day after dinner, Susans mother sat on the seat, announcing to the children the Golden Rule: “Treat others the way you want to be treated.” Susan reflected carefully and seriously on what her mother had said. She resolved that she w
25、ould keep in mind and follow the rule.One Saturday afternoon, she went to farmer Jasons inn (小旅馆) to get the pay for her mothers washing for the guests there, which amounted to five dollars. She found Jason in the yard, who, as all the villagers knew, was selfish and mean.His eyes clouded with anger
26、, as he had just finished a quarrel with one of his guests. He held in his hand an open wallet, full of bills. He barely noticed Susan until she made her request for the money. Instead of shouting at her, as usual, for troubling him when he was busy, he handed her a bank note.Feeling relieved for es
27、caping from Jason so easily, Susan hurried out of the inn. When carefully putting the money into her pocket, she discovered that Jason had given her two bills instead of one, and her first reaction was joy at the unexpected prize. She looked around and there was nobody nearby to share her discovery.
28、 “It is mine. All mine.” she said to herself. “I will buy mum a new coat with it, and she can give her old one to sister Mary, and then Mary can go to the Sunday school with me next winter. I wonder if I can buy a pair of shoes for brother Tom too.”Just at that moment, she realized that Jason must h
29、ave given the extra money to her by mistake, and therefore she had no right to own it. But a voice of temptation (诱惑) whispered, “He gave it, and you can keep it. He will never know, even if it is a mistake. ”Para.1:As Susan hurried home, this conflict went on in her mind._Para.2:Susans face became
30、red with embarrassment and annoyance._3.阅读下面短文，根据所给情节进行续写，使之构成一个完整的故事。Getting to watch surgeries should be exciting for any medical student. But in my case, while two doctors were doing the operation, I was checking my phone every 20 seconds to see how much longer until I could leave. I didnt belong
31、 there; I was only pretending to be there. The truth was, halfway through university, I knew I didnt want to be a doctor. And I had to decide whether to keep lying to myself, or change course.Before university, I had no idea what I wanted to do with my life. Id always wanted to do English but my par
32、ents didnt approve, saying there was no money in it. So I figured Id just pick a career that looked well-paid, satisfying, and would make my parents proud. “Doctor” hit all three, so I decided to do medicine. I knew all the coursework wouldnt be easy, but didnt expect to find it as hard as I did. I
33、spent many late nights and weekends studying my brains out, but still didnt get good grades. I just couldnt get the material to stick to my brain. By exam time, my grades were terrible and I felt like a fool, but I thought maybe a medical internship (实习医生期) would help raise my spirits. Absurdly, my
34、internship was where I realized how little I wanted to be a doctor.Every day Id just go into work and do exactly what I was told, go where I was told to go, and watch what I was told to watch. And then Id go home. It was fun whenever I got to play with expensive microscopes or watch crazy surgeries,
35、 but the rest of the time I struggled to get through the day. The other interns, however, practically worked so hard. They were so driven. I thought, “Wow, these interns really want to be doctors. I obviously dont.” It was a sad realization that led to a sadder, scarier question: If I didnt want to
36、be doctor, what did I want to do?注意：1.所续写短文的词数应为150左右；2.应使用5个以上短文中标有下划线的关键词语；3.续写部分分为两段，每段的开头语已为你写好；4.续写完成后，请用下划线标出你所使用的关键词语。Paragraph 1:It wasnt an easy decision. _Paragraph 2:Eventually, I changed my course to English writing and suddenly I was enjoying university. _4.阅读下面短文, 根据所给情节进行续写,使之构成一个完整的故
37、事。On Friday evening, Emmett and I went to a movie as scheduled. After purchasing the tickets and drinks, we entered the cinema with delight beforehand, waiting for the beginning of the movie.When I got up in the middle of the movie, Emmett whispered, “ Carter, where are you going?” “I forgot to call
38、 my mom to tell her what time to pick us up.” I whispered back, leaving my jacket on the seat.I squeezed past the people in my row, trying not to step on any feet while still watching the screen. I didnt want to miss a thing. Balfour, the good guy in the movie, was trapped in an underground cave.Whe
39、n I came back, Balfours flashlight almost went out. An enormous snake was moving toward him, twisting its body. Balfour struggled to loosen the chains around his hands and feet to reach his magic cape (魔法斗篷). With the cape around him, he could completely disappear.I crawled (缓慢行进) back across eight
40、people (I counted on the way out), never taking my eyes off the screen. I sat down in my seat slowly, then picked up my drink, and swallowed it quickly. But suddenly my brain said, “Thats not coke. Thats lemonade.” I looked down at the cup, just as the girl next to me shouted, “He drank my lemonade!
41、”“Shhhh!” the people around us said, making quiet complaints.“Wheres Emmett?” I asked, as if the girl had hidden him under her seat.“Carter, down here,” Emmett answered in a low voice. He was two rows ahead of me. I was in the wrong row! Everyone was turning around to look at me.“Here,” I said, hand
42、ing the girl her drink.“Eww,” she said. “You have had a drink of it, so you owe me a lemonade.”“Shhhh!” everyone said again.“OK, OK,” I said, starting my crawl across eight sets of feet again. Everybody were complaining as I inched out.“Dont come back,” the boy on the end said.注意:1. 所续写短文的词数应为 150 左
43、右；2. 至少使用 5 个短文中标有下划线的关键词语；3. 续写部分分为两段，每段的开头语已为你写好；4. 续写完成后，请用下划线标出你所使用的关键词语。Paragraph 1But the problem was that I had to come back to bring this girl a new lemonade._Paragraph 2I thought about crawling out of this row and back into Emmetts row, but I couldnt._5.阅读下面短文,根据所给情节进行续写,使之构成一个完整的故事。Mr. Tay
44、lor checked again: water, food, bandage, medicines, a compass, and a map wrapped in plastic. Bingo! He put all that he prepared for the coming hiking into his backpack.Mr. Taylor was fond of hiking, this time in particular, for it was the first time for him to hike with his two sons, Harry and Joel.
45、 Joel liked reading books about explorers and Harry joined the hiking club in his school this term. “It will be an unforgettable experience, definitely.” he whispered to himself, unconsciously a smile spreading over his face.Harry and Joel, however, argued for the first three miles of their hiking trip. Harry accused Joel of wearing smelly old shoes. Joel blamed Harry for using all of the bug spray(喷雾防虫剂). Harr
