1、读后续写示例与写作训练10【写作示例】【原文呈现】阅读下面短文，根据所给情节进行续写，使之构成一个完整的故事。Change is defined as to give a different position, course, or direction to.Change is essential in life because you learn from change and it gives you a new route to take in life.Many people in life tend to not understand change but its the ones
2、that do who are the successful ones.For years now I have no idea what I have been doing with my life.I wake up every morning ashamed of the person I am today, and fall asleep with the same mind set.I play everything in life by the book and never do anything out of the ordinary.I am a 30-year-old law
3、yer in New York.I spent most of my life in school perusing a job in Law.But being a lawyer was never my dream or goal in life.I honestly wanted to be a Writer.I have a great imagination and would write amazing stories in my head.I would write about slaying dragons and life far beyond what we can ima
4、gine today.I always knew that being a writer was never possible for me because it was a better financial decision to stay a lawyer.Recently, the days were abnormal for me.Usually I would fall asleep at ten and wake up at seven and drive to my office so I can get to work on time.But for some reason I
5、 couldnt go to sleep, and when I did fall asleep I had the same dream over and over again.It wasnt a dream I had ever had in the past.The dream starts with me in the ocean trying to go for a swim searching for something, but for some reason I start to drown and I cant even gasp for air.I have no con
6、trol over my body.Then a light shines through the bright waters and when I look up, all I can see is myself in a bright white room writing a novel.The I heard a voice say repeatedly “now is the time to try something new”.注意：1. 所续写短文的词数应为150左右；2. 应使用5个以上短文标有下划线的关键词语；3. 续写部分分为两段，每段的开头语已为你写好；4. 续写完成后，请
7、用下划线标出你所使用的关键词。Paragraph 1:That afternoon I quit my job at the law firm and I couldnt have been any happier._Paragraph 2: My life started at 30, and every day since that point I havent stopped enjoying life._【思维路径】核心内容 文本主要内容为：一位30岁的女律师曾经为了在律师行业取得好的职位，花了大量的时间去学习法律；但是当她在律师行业干了数年之后，她发现虽然收入很高，但她并不喜欢这种严
8、谨的、循规蹈矩的生活。于是，在她30岁的时候，她辞去这个工作，去追寻自己想当作家的梦想；后来的生活经历证明，她当年的抉择是正确的。写作思路(1)明确故事主题(theme)。本文作者开篇就告诉我们“改变”(change)在生活中的重要性，如“Change is essential in life because you learn from change and it gives you a new route to take in life”这句话告诉我们“改变”能给我们的生活带来新的可能性。然后，作者通过自己的亲身经历进一步说明这一主题。(2)理清主人公的矛盾所在(conflicts)。从文
9、章中的“I am a 30-year-old lawyer in New York.I spent most of my life in school perusing a job in Law.But being a lawyer was never my dream or goal in life.”可知，作者本来是在追求大多数人梦寐以求的律师职业，但后来发现自己并不是真正喜欢这一职业，而自己真正喜欢的是当作家。之后，根据文中的“The dream starts with me in the ocean trying to go for a swim searching for somet
10、hing, but for some reason I start to drown and I cant even gasp for air.I have no control over my body”可知，作者内心中的这个矛盾愈发激烈。(3)根据已知事件及续写段落首句预测故事发展(development)。根据第二段的首句“For years now I have no idea what I have been doing with my life.”可知，作者对自己的当前的工作毫无真正意义上的好感。从第四段的首句“I honestly wanted to be a Writer”可知
11、作者的真正梦想是想成为作家。根据第五段的开头部分“Recently, the days were abnormal for me.Usually I would fall asleep at ten and wake up at seven and drive to my office so I can get to work on time.”可知作者内心的矛盾越来越强烈。最后根据续写的第一段的开头“That afternoon I quit my job at the law firm and I couldnt have been any happier”可知，作者最终选择了追求自己内心
12、真正的梦想。(4)结合下划线词罗列写作要点(points)。根据文中所给的划线词，如change, my life, my dream, being a writer, control等可知，作者在文章的后半部分可能会说明：(1)自己是否敢于做出“改变”；(2)如果“改变”了，那改变之后的结果怎样；(3)作者通过自己的经历，最后对“改变”究竟持怎样一种态度。(5)结合文章的手段决定文章的结束部分(endings)。根据续写的第一段的开头“That afternoon I quit my job at the law firm and I couldnt have been any happie
13、r”可以罗列一些作者在“改变”自后自己的生活与心情的变化。根据续写的第二段的开头“My life started at 30, and every day since that point I havent stopped enjoying life”可以在文章的结尾处说明作者对自己这些经历的看法与感受。参考范文That afternoon I quit my job at the law firm and I couldnt have been any happier. Relieved from that job, I walked taller that day.When I got h
14、ome I threw away my suits and nicely ironed pants and went out and got a pair of ripped jeans and a baggy shirt. I could not have been any more wrong.However, it wasnt just a dream. My opportunityto make something good out of my life began. It was tough at first, but I just made myself under control
15、. My life started at 30, and every day since that point I havent stopped enjoying life.I can now enjoy the smaller things in life like watching the sunset or going for a walk in the park. I also have found the woman of my dreams and just cant get enough of her. And by the way I started to write and
16、have been on the best sellers list for the last 2 months.Things have definitely turned around. Yes, change is a good thing not just for me but for everyone, it gives us all an opportunity to take a chance. (156 words)范文解析 范文围绕故事的情节和主要矛盾进行了合情合理的拓展。职业女律师的工作本身就非常艰辛，所以故事中的主人公想要摆脱这种过于正式的律师生活去追求自己的“作家梦”，是
17、合情合理的。因此，范文的结尾部分特别强调“改变是一件好事”。提炼归纳 1.熟读原文，把握主线。这是一篇夹叙夹议的文章。作者在文章的开头部分就在说明“改变”的重要性。由此我们可以推测出，作者接下来可能会通过一系列的经历与体验，展现这一主题。2.把握情节，合理拓展。作者通过“Change is essential in life- For years now I have no idea what I have been doing with my life-But being a lawyer was never my dream or goal in life-I honestly wante
18、d to be a Writer- Recently, the days were abnormal for me- That afternoon I quit my job at the law firm and I couldnt have been any happier-My life started at 30, and every day since that point I havent stopped enjoying life-”这一完整的情节叙述，告诉我们改变是生活中的必须，即与文章第一段中的“Change is essential in life because you
19、learn from change and it gives you a new route to take in life.”相呼应，因此，在续写的时候，就需要把握这一情节变化，进行合理的拓展。3. 关注衔接，确保连贯。通过对作者写作的情节的把握，我们可以保证续写不会偏离文章的发展的方向。但是，我们必须使用有效的衔接手段，这样才能确保续写意义的连贯性。例如，范文中的when, however, and, since, but, yes等都是很好的衔接手段。【写作演练】1.阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。续写的词数应为150左右。The most de
20、licious memories seem to happen during the holidays. And like a squirrel preparing for winter, I put them away to enjoy slowly during the long winter months. Sometimes, I enjoy them for years.Among them are sweetest recollections: my little girls at the church play and the moment they got their firs
21、t angel wings; a pink dolly stroller(手推车) wheeled into the bedroom with a tiny voice declaring, Look what Santa Claus brought me! ; or New Years snowmen wearing bright scarves borrowed from a grandmas fragrant drawer.But there is one memory that is a little bittersweet - sort of like 80% dark chocol
22、ate, but still good for you.This story brings to mind a colorful candy dish and a very little boy. The occasion was somewhere between Christmas and New Years when a few candies in a dish remained behind, a bright spot in dull winter gray.Wrapped in Decembers chill, my then 3-year old grandson, Justi
23、n, and I had dashed from the warmth of my parked car into the building where I planned to take care of a few work-related tasks.A smiling secretary greeted us as we brushed the snowflakes and rubbed our hands to chase the cold. Then with my grandchild close to my side, I busied myself, finishing the
24、 items of business that had brought us there. But while his hand remained in mine, his eyes fell on the candy dish sitting nearby.As we turned to leave, the thoughtful and very observant woman behind the desk asked the question all children wait to hear.Honey, the kindly woman said, peering over her
25、 glasses at Justin. Would you like a candy bar? she asked, her hand pushing the dish close for an easier reach.The boy looked up questioningly, his eyes meeting mine, permission hanging in the air. A slight nod from me and then a hurried beeline to the candy dish followed. One candy bar was already
26、in his hand.Para 1: Justin! I said from the doorway._Para 2: In the humor of the moment, I felt something hard to swallow._2.阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。续写的词数应为150左右。It seemed Id done everything Id ever wanted to do in my life, but I had one regret. I was born in 1898, the oldest of five ki
27、ds. Papa couldnt spare me to go to school, so I worked in the fields with him till I was 21 years old.Everywhere I went, I learned some hard lessons about what happens to a man who even cant read the alphabet. People cheat you out of wages. They sell you a ticket to one city, take your money and han
28、d you a ticket to somewhere else.By 1928, Id been wandering for nine years. I met a woman named Elzenia. We fell in love, married and moved to Dallas, where I got work fixing roads for the city. When Amelia, the oldest of our seven children, first went to school, I took my wife aside. “Elzenia,” I s
29、aid. “I dont want the kids to know I cant read or write.”In 1938, one day my boss called me in. “George,” he said. “No one knows those machines like you do. Id like to promote you.” But my thrill and surprise were cut short when he said, “Fill out this application and well get you a raise.” I couldn
30、t admit the truth. I thanked him and walked out of his office. I did stay right where I was, until I turned 65 and my boss made me retire. But I didnt stop working. For the next 25 years, I lived a happy life, but it still seemed to me like something was missing.A young fellow handed me a piece of p
31、aper. Its information about adult education classes. People can learn to read and write. Now Im 102. I thought of my friends and neighbours and what they might think if they found out I couldnt read. After all these years, my secret would be out. But all my life Ive wanted to read. It was high time
32、for action.Paragraph 1: The young man drove me to a huge building and led me into a spacious classroom, which was crowded with elderly people like me._Paragraph 2: Im still going to school._3.阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。续写的词数应为150左右。The Board Meeting had come to an end. Bob started to stand
33、 up and knocked into the table, spilling his coffee over his notes. How embarrassing! I am getting so clumsy(笨拙的) in my old age. Everyone had a good laugh, and soon we were all telling stories of our most embarrassing moments. It came around to Frank, who sat quietly listening to the others. Someone
34、 said, Come on, Frank. Tell us your most embarrassing moment. Frank laughed and began to tell us of his childhood. I grew up in San Pedro. My Dad was a fisherman. He had his own boat, but it was hard making a living on the sea. He worked hard and would stay out until he caught enough to feed a big f
35、amily. Not just enough for our family, but also for his Mom and Dad and the other kids that were still at home. He looked at us and said, I wish you could have met my Dad. He was strong from pulling the nets and fighting the seas for his catch. When you got close to him, he smelled like the ocean. N
36、o matter how much my mother washed his clothes, they would still smell of the sea and of fish. Franks voice dropped a bit. When the weather was bad, he would drive me to school. He had this old truck that he used in his fishing business. That truck was older than he was. Half the time, he would slam
37、 to a stop and the old truck would belch(喷出) a cloud of smoke. He would pull right up in front, and it seemed like everybody would be standing around and watching. Then he would lean over and give me a goodbye kiss on the cheek and tell me to be a good boy. It was so embarrassing for me. Here, I was
38、 twelve years old. I was a big boy and my Dad would lean over and kiss me goodbye! He paused and then went on, I remember the day I decided I was too old for a goodbye kiss. When we got to the school and came to a stop, he had his usual big smile. He started to lean toward me, but I put my hand up a
39、nd said, No, Dad. 注意：1. 所续写短文的词数应为 150 左右；2. 续写部分分为两段，每段的开头语已为你写好；Paragraph 1:It was the first time I had ever talked to him that way, and he had this surprised look on his face._Paragraph 2:Frank got a funny look on his face, and the tears began to well up in his eyes._4.阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之
40、构成一篇完整的短文。续写的词数为150左右。I was a mother of four children, working at a low-paid job. Money was always valuable, but we had a roof over our heads, food on the table, and clothes in the wardrobe. I always tell myself to be brave and strong. I hope all my efforts would be worthwhile, as long as my childre
41、n can grow up healthily. It was Christmas time. We drove downtown to see the Christmas lights, and enjoyed a special dinner, but the big excitement for the kids was the fun of Christmas shopping at the mall. This was a tradition of my family, so they all looked forward to the coming of the season of
42、 goodwill. They talked and planned for weeks ahead of time, asking each other what they wanted for Christmas.The big day arrived and we started out early. I gave each of the four kids a twenty -dollar bill and asked them to search for gifts. Then everyone scattered(分散开)with the bill. I sat at a tabl
43、e in a caf waiting for my children and enjoying an instant of silence. It must be a happy day.Back in the car driving home, everyone was excited about Christmas, laughing and asking each other about what they had bought. I noted Ginger, my younger daughter had only one small and flat bag with her. I
44、 could see enough through the plastic bag to tell that she had bought candy barsfifty-cent candy bars! What did she do with that twenty-dollar bill I had given her? I was so angry. After getting home, I called her into my bedroom and closed the door. I couldnt hold back my anger and shouted at her, What about the rest of the money? No one would be convinced all these candies are worth 20 dollars. What do you want to do with the rest of the money?Paragraph 1:She was shocked at my reaction and burst into tears. _Paragraph 2:My anger disappeared. _
