1、Section_ Grammar 去掉 a第三句：raiseraising; free freely第四句：lost 前加 was第五句：that which; diddo第六句：like as第七句：heI第八句：inon一、基本结构参观报告类的作文要求作者把参观的整个过程都完整地叙述出来，并侧重对参观过程的所见所闻进行详细描述。一般来说，既然是参观的报告，肯定是已经发生了的事情，所以作文的主要时态应该是一般过去时态。参观报告类的作文一般采取“三段式结构”：1开头：简要说明参观的总体情况：参观的目的地、参观的时间、所见所闻和遇到的人等。2主体：对整个参观的过程进行详细的描述，特别需要注意的是
2、：(1)要以恰当合理的顺序把所看到的景物等表述出来。(2)既要描述所见还要有所感想。3结尾：对这次的参观做整体的评价。二、增分佳句1As is known to all, Changsha is a city with a long history, where there are so many places of interest.众所周知，长沙是一座历史悠久的城市，有很多名胜。2It has an area of about 10,000 square kilometres, and about 7 million people live here.它占地 1 万平方千米，大约 7 百万
3、人口住在这里。3It is a modern city which is developing fast.它是发展很快的现代化城市。4It is said that hundreds and thousands of tourists come to visit our city from home and abroad.据说国内外成千上万的游客来参观我们的城市。5They say that free entrance will attract more visitors, which will no doubt contribute to promoting knowledge and cu
4、lture.他们认为门票免费会吸引更多的游客，毫无疑问，这会促进知识和文化的发展。题目要求根据下面的要点，写出参观上海的所见所闻和所感。1我和父母去了上海，很多漂亮的建筑给我留下了深刻的印象；2我们先去了美丽的黄浦江，又去了繁忙的南京路，并在那儿享受了购物的乐趣，此外我们还去了博物馆并看了一场有趣的科幻电影；3这次去上海的参观很好。注意：1.词数 100 左右；2可以适当增加细节，以使行文连贯。第一步：审题构思很关键一、审题1确定体裁：本文为参观报告。2确定人称：本文应用第一人称。3确定时态：本文应以一般过去时为主。二、构思第一部分：参观时间、地点及总体印象。第二部分：详述参观过程。第三部分：
5、参观后的感受。第二步：核心词汇想周全1be_off_to 动身去2impress 给留下印象3view 风景4crowded 拥挤的5have_fun 玩得高兴6unforgettable 难以忘记的第三步：由词扩句雏形现1那儿有一些漂亮的楼房，给我留下了深刻印象。(and 连接并列句)There_are_some_beautiful_buildings_and_they_impress_me_very_much.2它很长而且有一些海鸥停息在海面上。(on the surface of)It_was_long_and_some_seagulls_were_resting_on_the_surf
6、ace_of_the_sea.3我从没见过这么漂亮的景色。(never 位于句首)Never_had_I_seen_so_beautiful_views.4我们去了南京路，街道繁忙拥挤。(which 引导非限制性定语从句 )We_went_to_Nanjing_Road,_which_was_very_busy_and_crowded.5我们买了一些纪念品，并且在那儿购物时，享受到了乐趣。(and 连接并列句)We_bought_some_souvenirs,_and_we_had_great_fun_when_going_shopping_there.6我们参观了既酷又大的博物馆。We_vi
7、sited_the_cool_and_big_museum.7在博物馆里，我们看了一场有趣的科幻电影。(science fiction)We_saw_an_interesting_science_fiction_movie_in_the_museum.第四步：句式升级造亮点1用 which 引导非限制性定语从句改写句 1There_are_some_beautiful_buildings,_which_impress_me_very_much.2用现在分词作状语改写句 5Having_bought_some_souvenirs,_we_had_great_fun_when_going_shop
8、ping_there.3用 where 引导非限制性定语从句合并句 6 和句 7We_visited_the_cool_and_big_museum,_where_we_saw_an_interesting_science_fiction_movie.第五步：过渡衔接联成篇Last week, I was off to Shanghai with my parents. Shanghai is a big city. There are some beautiful buildings, which impress me very much.Firstly, we went to the Hu
9、angpu River. It was long and some seagulls were resting on the surface of the sea. Never had I seen so beautiful views. After that, we went to Nanjing Road, which was very busy and crowded. Having bought some souvenirs, we had great fun when going shopping there. In addition, we visited the cool and big museum, where we saw an interesting science fiction movie. It was great.I love Shanghai and I enjoy my visit very much. I will never forget the unforgettable experience.
