1、30 30 同情同情 20212021 年中考英语书面表达高分作文攻略（全国通用版）年中考英语书面表达高分作文攻略（全国通用版） 相关话题解读相关话题解读 同情是仁爱之心的具体体现，是一个人对他人不幸遭遇的感同身受，也是互助原则的具体行为。拥有 了同情心，我们才能对他人伸出援助之手。通过同情去理解别人的痛苦，减轻别人的痛苦，自己的内心也 能更丰富。为他人送去温暖，为自己带来收获。 如何把同情这一情感转化为行动， 是这一主题中主要会涉及到的写作内容。因此，该主题通常会和帮 助、鼓励他人等内容相联系，比如如何帮助灾区人民，如何为慈普活动出一份力等。写作时要注意，无论 是记叙文还是说明文，在这一主题
2、的写作中，需要传递出正能量。 相关话题作文写作示例指导相关话题作文写作示例指导 实践案例实践案例 题目题目 Write a composition in at least 60 words according to the given situation. (根据所给情最写一篇不少于 60 个 词的短文。) Suppose you are a member of the volunteer club in your school. You plan to go to are mote area this winter holiday for a few days to help and enc
3、ourage the poor kids there.What will you do there and why do you want to do it? 审题审题 这是一篇材料作文。在落笔前，要认真审阅所给的材料。材料作文的审题正确与否，将直接影响到文 章的质量。所以材料作文的写作关键是仔细、全面地理解材料内容，把握主题，从而组织材料。根据情境 信息来阐述内容。 题目所设定的情境为:寒假中你要去偏远地区， 鼓励帮助那里的孩子， 为他们做些什么。 根据材料信息， 写作的关键点在于对what和why这两个问题的说明和阐述。那么学生写作时。首先需要说明:打算为这些 偏远地区的孩子做些什么?比如
4、送孩子一些日用品、衣物等:然后，还需要对此进行解释说明，即为什么要这 样做。写作时需要注意时态。大文应体用一般将来时的动作和状态。 段落结构段落结构 本文可采用三段式，即“总一分总 的写作结构: 第一段:文章的总起，抛出文章的主题和中心内容，即打算利用假期去帮助贫苦的孩子。 第二段:分层叙述，对文章的主题展开说明，具体阐述要为孩子做些什么事，为什么打算做这些。 第三段:文章的收尾，对之前阐述的内容做个总结和提升，也可以呼吁大家一起帮 助这些孩子。 “总一分总”的段落结构能使文章的脉络互相贯通，各部分各有特点又紧密联系。 核心语汇核心语汇 have pity on sb.同情、怜悯某人 feel
5、 sorry for sb.同情;惋惜;为.而难过 cheer sb. up 鼓舞某人;使某人振作 provide sb. with sth.为某人提供某物 encouragement and support 鼓励和支持 help sb to do sth./with sth.帮助某人某事 prepare sth for sb. 为某人准备某物 参考句型参考句型 Its urgent that.是紧急的。 Every time I think of . I cant help doing sch.每当我想到.我都忍不住. I will . in the following ways.我将用下列
6、方法. We should make every effort to do sth.我们应不遗余力地做某事。 It is obvious I clear that.是显而易见的。 习作习作 In this coming winter holiday, I will go to the remote area to do something for the poor kids there.As those kids are in poor condition, they may be short of clothes, shoes or books. Thus, I plan to provid
7、e them with some of my books and clothes. I believe they can learn more knowledge from the books, and the clothes can keep them warm. During my stay there, I will also play with them and talk to them to let them feel happier. Whats more, I would like to take some photos for them so that I can call o
8、n more people to help them on the Internet Im really looking forward to the trip. 注注 be in poor condition 和 be short of 两个短语用得好。 长短句的交替使用，使得文章的句式较为丰富多变。 点评点评: 本文思路清晰，内容完整，句意连贯，语言规范。该生通过仔细审题，把握住了题目的重点内容和关 键信息，用较为扎实的语言功底，流畅地将习作内容呈现出来。这篇习作的时态运用得当，且文中出现了 定的好词好句， 比如 be short of, in poor condition 等，值得借鉴。
9、 相关话题满分作文必背相关话题满分作文必背 （一）（一） 题目题目 Write at least 60 words on the topic When I see an old person fall down in the street,1. (以“当我看到老人 在街上摔倒，.为题，写-篇不少于 60 个词的短文，标点符号不占格。 ） Reference words (Use at least two of them): a traditional virtue (美德); in favor of/ against; calm; get along with; care for 范文范文 H
10、elping others is a traditional virtue. When I see an old person fall down in the street,I will run towards him at once to help him without hesitation. First of ll, I will keep calm and check whether he is injured or not. Then, if necessary, I will dial 120 so that he can betaken to the hospital imme
11、diately. Besides, I will also help him to call his family member to come and accompany him. I decide to help him, because I was taught to help others with my efforts since I was a little boy. When an old person falls down, he must be very scared and feel helpless. Therefore, helping him is something
12、 I must do. （二）（二） 题目题目 假设你参加了一个志愿者项目，暑假去偏远地区(a remote area)和小朋友们生活一段时间。出发之前， 你希望得到更多关于项目的信息。你列了张表，请确定你最希望了解的 1-2 个关键问题，然后写-封信给组 织者 Mr. Prince,请求他的帮助。信件格式已给，标点符号不占格，至少 60 个字。 My list Things I can do with the children Weather Things I need to prepare Medical care Basic information of the children the
13、re Food 范文范文 Dear Mr. Prince, It is my great honor to be a member of the volunteer program. I will appreciate it a lot if you can provide me with more detailed information. First, I want to have a clear picture of the basic information of the children there, such as their hobbies, their age and thei
14、r living conditions. The more I know about the children, the better I can do. Second,the information of the weather condition there is of great importance to me, as I want to prepare proper clothes to avoid getting ill. I am looking forward to hearing from you soon and I will try my best to help the
15、 children. Yours Sincerely, Allen （三）（三） 题目题目 Write a letter with at least 60 words according to the given situation. (根据所给情景，写一封不少于 60 个词 的信，标点符号不占格。) Situation: Your friend Tom has broken his leg recently. He has to stay at home in bed for at least one month. He feels very upset and worries about
16、his studies a lot. Please write a letter to him to express your sympathy and cheer him up. 范文范文 Dear Tom, Im really sorry to hear that you have broken your leg. It must be very painful. Now in order to get well soon, you have to stay in bed for some time. It must be very boring but youd better take
17、the doctors advice. I know you are worried about your studies, but take it easy,I will help you with your studies as soon as you get well. So you dont have to worry too much. The most important thing for you is to stay in bed and try to recover. I believe you will be better soon! Yours Sincerely, Allen
