1、09 09 校园生活校园生活 20212021 年中考英语书面表达高分作文攻略（全国通用版）年中考英语书面表达高分作文攻略（全国通用版） 素材储备与写作指导素材储备与写作指导 校园生活是比较好写、有东西可写的话题，因为作为学生，大部分的时间都是在学校这个大环境中度 过的。就考试题目而言，要选取校园生活中丰富多彩、受益匪浅、意义非凡的些话题， 如:最喜欢的校园活 动、 最成功的竞赛经历、 最难忘的师生情谊、 最不舍的好友陪伴、最受益的一次课堂等。只要内容是积 极向上的，都可以进行取材。同样的，语言上一定要注意用多样的句型和生动的词汇来使记叙更流畅、更 吸引人。 我们就以最常见的activity
2、为例来进行详细说明。 实践案例实践案例 题目题目 Write a short passage of at least 60 words on the topic The most / est activity I took part in at school. (以“我在校参加的-次最 的活动”为题，写一篇 不少于 60 个词的作文。) 为了丰富学生生活，给学生提供更多的学习和展示平台，学校每年举行各种活动，请选取其中一项活 动，谈谈你的经历和对这项活动的评价。 审题审题 这篇全命题文章在审题过程中要注查的核心词有“活动” 、 “经历” 、 “评价” ，这些是作的重要得分点。 (1)“活动”要
3、求前面补充定语，即某形容词最高级，井且该形容词应是有积极向上意的，如 interesting / exciting / unforgettable 1 meaningful 等等。选材方面要选择学生在校里参加的某一项具体活动，比如“机器 人设计比赛” 、 “歌唱比赛” 、 “英语单词拼写活动” “跑步比赛”等。 (2)“经历”是文章的重点部分，要求阐述自己的经历，从自身出发，写出自己的真情感。要注意该部 分的时态应该是过去时，交代清楚叙事的几大要素。注意要用相对应的语来突出所补充的形容词，如补充 词是 interesting,则语言就要生动活泼、突出如何有趣。(3)“评价”这部分是对补充题目中
4、形容词的一个呼应 和拓展，学生要在这部分里把这活动的积极影响充分表达出来。 段落结构段落结构 根据题目要求，可以参考以下结构进行写作: 第一部分 The 1st part 点明你曾参加过的你认为最 _的一次学校活动。 Our school holds a variety of activities to enrich our campus life. Or of the most interesting 1 exciting / meaningful 1 creative 1 successful unforgettable activities is . 第二部分 The 2nd part
5、阐述你参加这项活动的经历。 I took part in . activity last year. I was very excited to take part in . activity when . 第三部分 The 3rd part 你为何认为这项活动最 (补充题目的形容词)，对你有什么积极影响，首尾呼应。 . makes the activity so . and I learn . from it. It has a great effect on my . and I hope our school will provide more chances like that. 核心
6、语汇核心语汇 campus life 校园生活 take part in/ join in 参加 take an active part in 积极参加 make full use of these activities to improve oneself 充分 利用这些活动提升自. provide us with more opportunities to study 提供更多学习机会 enrich our life 丰富我们的生活 a sense of fulfillment 成就感 make an effort/ make efforts to do 努力做某事 make a join
7、t effort 共同努力 make progress 取得进步 参考句型参考句型 . activity takes place / is held in our school every year.我校每年都举.活动。 The more activities we take part in, the more colorful life we will have. 参加的活动越多，生活就会越丰富多彩。 The reason why I like this activity is that .我 喜欢这项活动的理由是. Taking part in the activity enables m
8、e to .参加这些活动使我能够. Through this activity, I learn that .通过这项活动我学到了. It is this activity that helps me .正是这项活动帮助我. 习作一习作一 The most exciting activity I took part in at school I like English, and the English Debating Contest is the most exciting activity for me at school. I took part in the contest last
9、 month and our team won the first prize. We were very excited but the result was not surprising because we practiced a lot together, which is one of the reasons why I love this activity cooperation. Without the teammates joint efforts and encouragement, there is no way of achieving success. On the o
10、ther hand, this activity teaches me to be confident. It is self- confidence that helps me express myself out loud. And I believe it makes me a better man in the future. Im looking forward to the next English Debating Contest. 点评：点评： 这篇习作的整体结构安排有失偏颇，开篇点题“最振奋人心的英语辩论赛”活动，然后只用一个句子 表明自己参加过这次活动，接下来阐述这项活动的
11、教育意义一。合作”和“自信” ，最后结尾以表达愿望结 束。这样的安排重点谈论了“评价” 而忽略了描述“经历” ，不符合题目要求中的结构安排，也不能有效 地从经历描述中看出“最振奋人心”这一主题。但语言方面该学生的水平还是较高的，用词地道，表达流 畅， surprising 1cooperation / express / joint efforts 1 look forward to 等为文章添彩； 句型丰富， 用到了强调句、 定语从句等:句与句之间的逻辑关系词如 because 1 on the other hand 等也使文章整体紧凑有力。 因此， 如果在 审题上能够再权衡一下“经历”和“
12、评价” ，将其在内容上的比例再调整下，这篇文章将会提升一个档次。 修改稿修改稿 The most exciting activity I took part in at school I like English, and the English Debating Contest is the most exciting activity for me at school. I took part in the contest last month. Our team got well prepared for it and rehearsed many times. Of course, d
13、ifficulties and disagreement appeared sometimes but the teammates goal was the same - to win the first prize. And finally we achieved our goal because we supported and encouraged each other until the end. I learn cooperation from this activity. Teamwork is the key to our success. Besides, this activ
14、ity also teaches me to be confident. It is self confidence that helps me express myself out loud. And I believe it makes me a better man in the future. Im looking forward to the next English Debating Contest. 习作习作 2 The most meaningful activity I took part in at school As a Grade Nine student, altho
15、ugh Im busy with my study, I take part in a variety of activities at school And the 1000-meter race is the most meaningful one. I took part in this race last year. I tried my best and I believed I could hold on to the finishing line because I had practiced running very hard, To my great joy, I made
16、it!Although I didnt get any prize, I broke my record in the game. I brought honor to not only myself, but also my class. Therefore, the 1000 meter race is the most meaningful activity I took part in at school. 点评点评: 这篇文章内容完整，表达流畅，通过对“参加千米赛跑”的描述，体会到这一-活动“意义非凡”一一 “尽管没有获奖， 但是因为自己的努力和坚持， 打破了自己的最佳纪录， 并且为
17、自己和班级都赢得了荣誉” 。 简单的描述中却透露着莫大的自豪，这就是紧扣主题“有意义” 。语言方面，该生用词简洁，无浮夸之词， 表达流畅，朗朗上口，时态准确无误。因此，从这篇文章来看， “简洁” 有时候也可以写出优秀作文。 相关话题优秀范文解析相关话题优秀范文解析 （一）（一） Getting on with Classmates There is a lot of fun in my school life, because I have many lovely and friendly classmates there. We get on well with each other. I
18、often study in the classroom with my classmates. While meeting with difficult problems in our homework, we discuss them together.When classmates are in trouble, we try our best to help them. After school, we play sports on the playground. We play basketball, football, badminton and soon. Sometimes w
19、e have some class activities, such as singing songs together.We are in a harmonious class. I am very glad to meet my classmates, who bring me so much fun. I hope that we could all get into a good senior high school. 参考译文参考译文 和同学相处和同学相处 我的校园生活充满着很多乐趣，因为在那里我有很多可爱又友好的同学。我们相处得很好。我经常和 我的同学在教室里学习。当做作业遇到难题
20、时，我们会起讨论。 当同学有西难的时候。我们会尽最大的努 力来带助他们，课后，我们在操场上活动。我们年球阳足球，打羽毛球，等等。有时候我们有电班级活动， 比如起明取。 我们(生活)在一个和谐的班级里。 我非常高兴遇到我的同学们，他们带给我很多的快乐。我希望我们都能进入一个好的高中。 亮点词汇亮点词汇 friendly 友好的 difficult .困难的 discuss 讨论 in trouble 在困难中 class activities 班级活动 discuss 讨论 出彩句型出彩句型 There is a lot of fun in my school life.我的校园生活充满着很多乐
21、趣。 We get on well with each other.我们相处得很好。 We try our best to do. 我们尽最大的努力来. We are in a harmonious class. 我们(生活)在一个和谐的班级里。 I am very gad to.我非常高. 高分点评高分点评 本文的主题明确，逻辑清晰，主要叙述了和同学相处的时光，表达了浓浓的同学之博。文章采取了三 段式的写法，开篇点题，中间详细展开，最后再进行回应，并表达自己的期里，脉络清楚，文章的句式简 法而又富有变化，短语、 词组的运用也恰到好处，如”a iot of fun”get on well wi
22、th 等。 （二）（二） A Relay Race The sports meeting in our school is very interesting, and many students participate in it every year. This year, I took part in the relay race, in which I ran the last lap. It was the final event at the sports meeting. Everyone paid great attention to it. All the runners go
23、t ready at the starting line. As soon as the race began, everyone was too nervous to cheer. When it was my turn, I could feel that a runner was catching up with me, so I tried my best to run faster.Finally, our class won the first prize in this most exciting event. 1 was very happy that | won the pr
24、ize for my class. This was the most unforgettable sports meeting that I had had. 参考译文参考译文 一次接力赛一次接力赛 我们学校的运动会很有趣，每年很多学生都会参与到其中去。 今年，我参加了接力赛，在比赛中我跑最后一棒。 这是运动会的最后一个项目。每个人都很关注这个 项目。所有的运动员在起跑线上做准备。比赛一开始，所有人都紧张得停止了呼喊。当轮到我时，我能感 到有一名运动员正在追上我，所以我尽最大的努力让自己跑得更快一些。最后，我们班在这项最激动人心 的项目中赢得了第一名。 我非常高兴自己为班级赢得了奖项。这是我
25、最难忘的一次运动会。 亮点词汇亮点词汇 participate in.参加.参. relay race 接力赛 starting line 起跑线 nervous 不安的;紧张的 win the first prize 赢得一等奖 出彩句型出彩句型 Everyone paid great attention to.每个人都很关注. nervous 不安的，掌来的 as soon as. .一.就. everyone was .每个人都.以至. It was ones turn.轮到某人。 This is the most unforgettable. that I had.这是我最难忘的. 高
26、分点评高分点评 本文将接力赛的interesting 描写得淋漓尽致，使读者产生身临其境的感觉，感受着运动场.上的紧张与 激动。本文的开头、过程、结尾交代得清清楚楚，让读者一览便明。作者在文中还运用了大量的精彩句式， 如 0. t. It was one s turn.等。 相关话题满分作文必背相关话题满分作文必背 （一） 书面表达： Write a passe of at less 60 words about the topic “A ten minute break.(以“十分钟的休息时间”为题写篇不少 于 60 个词的短文，标点符号不占格。) 提示:进入初三以来，同学们信感学习任务重，
27、压力大。许多同学争分夺秒，甚至连课间十分钟的休息 时间也在看书做题。请以“A ten minute break为题，描写这一现象(包括你自己的做法)，并针对这一现象谈 谈你的看法。 A ten-minute break Graduation is around the corner, so we are under a lot of pressure and spend most time going over lessons. Some of my classmates even make use of their ten-minute break to do their homework.
28、 But for me, I just want to take a good rest during this period of time in order to learn more efficiently in my next class. The reason is that we are not supermen, and we need rest, which can ensure us a fresh mind to learn better. If we keep working hard during the ten minute break, there is no do
29、ubt that some students will be s0 tired that they will even fall asleep in class Therefore, when a class is over, I advise all of us to walk out of the classroom and take a dep breath to have a good rest. （二）（二） Write a passage on “A letter to my headmaster/headmistress”in at least 60 words about th
30、e according to the given situation (以“给校长的一 封信” 为题，写筒不少于 60 个词的文章。提示:初中学习阶投肯定给你留下 许多回忆，有甜美， 有苦湿，这些都是宝贵的人生经话在即将告别你的初中生活时，请你以 Susan 的名义 给校长写封信，分享件让你最难忘的校园活动，并提出一”个你最希望学校改进的方面。 Dear Headmaster, My graduation is approaching and I am writing to share an unforgettable activity with you and discuss one pro
31、blem about our school. Our school holds various activities for us every year and they bring us lots of wonderful memories. Thank you and all of our teachers. One of my favorite activities is our last sports meeting. It was special because most of the teachers, including you, joined us, which made th
32、e sports events far more exciting and meaningful than before. I also want to tell you one problem that I want our school to solve. Our cafeteria provides us with delicious lunch but there are too few seats. Some students have to stand by the table for food. Therefore, I hope you will help improve the situation in our cafeteria. Sincerely yours, Susan
