1、读后续写示例与写作训练3【写作示例】【原文呈现】阅读下面短文，根据所给情节进行续写，使之构成一个完整的故事。One day when I was 12, my mother gave me an order: I was to walk to the public library, and borrow at least one book for the summer. This was one more weapon for her to defeat my strange problem inability to read.In the library, I found my way in
2、to the“Childrens Room.”I sat down on the floor and pulled a few books off the shelf at random. The cover of a book caught my eye. It presented a picture of a beagle. I had recently had a beagle, the first and only animal companion I ever had as a child. He was my secret sharer, but one morning, he w
3、as gone, given away to someone who had the space and the money to care for him. I never forgot my beagle.There on the books cover was a beagle which looked identical to my dog. I ran my fingers over the picture of the dog on the cover. My eyes ran across the title, Amos, the Beagle with a Plan. Unkn
4、owingly, I had read the title. Without opening the book, I borrowed it from the library for the summer.Under the shade of a bush, I started to read about Amos. I read very, very slowly with difficulty. Though pages were turned slowly, I got the main idea of the story about a dog who, like mine, had
5、been separated from his family and who finally found his way back home. That dog was my dog, and I was the little boy in the book. At the end of the story, my mind continued the final scene of reunion, on and on, until my own lost dog and I were, in my mind, running together. When I finished my read
6、ing, a stream of tears ran down my checks. It was until then I realized that I have overcome my inability to read. Thus, this was the very first book for me which I had read through and deeply immersed in real sense.注意：1. 所续写短文的词数应为150左右；2. 应使用5个以上短文标有下划线的关键词语；3. 续写部分分为两段，每段的开头语已为你写好；4. 续写完成后，请用下划线标
7、出你所使用的关键词。Paragraph 1:My mothers call returned me to the real world. I suddenly realized something:_Paragraph 2: Last year, my mother was so proud that his son was rewarded a PhD in literature._【思维路径】核心内容 文本主要内容为：故事中的“我”从小患有阅读障碍，某年暑假，母亲鼓励“我”必须完成一本书的阅读，于是“我”便去图书馆寻找读物，偶然间，“我”发现了一本故事书，该书的封面上是一只猎犬，这让“我”
8、想起了自己曾经养过的小狗。在兴趣的驱使下，我成功的读完了整本书，克服了阅读障碍。写作思路(1)明确故事人物关系(characters)。故事中主要人物为患有阅读障碍的“我”和“我”的母亲。(2)理清故事主要事件(events)。故事主人公“我”患有阅读障碍，主人公的母亲为了让他克服这个障碍要求他暑假必须完成一本书的阅读，于是“我”便去图书馆借书，一本关于猎犬的书引起了主人公的兴趣，他想起了自己曾经的宠物，最后主人公成功看完了整本书克服了他的阅读障碍。(3)根据已知人物、事件及续写段落首句预测故事发展(development)。故事总体的发展应该是主人公“我”开始对阅读产生兴趣，每个礼拜都会去图
9、书馆借书看书，并且一直到大学他也从未停止过对阅读的热爱，毕业后“我”拿到了文学博士学位，并且成为了一名作家。续写第一段：“我”开始热爱上了阅读，在母亲的鼓励下，我每天坚持去图书馆阅读各类书籍，并且我也尝试着自己去写一些故事，到了大学，“我”主修文学，对阅读的热爱丝毫不减。续写第二段：“我”成功拿到了文学博士的学位，母亲为我感到骄傲，并且“我”也找到了人生的方向，即成为一名作家，而这一切完全归功于那一年暑假我读的第一本书。(4)结合下划线词罗列写作要点(points)。结合下划线词和文本内容，展开尽可能丰富的想象，罗列出尽可能多的故事发展情节。例如，第一段可以通过问以下问题来获取写作要点“Did
10、 he overcome his inability to read? Did he go on reading? What was the influence of the first book?”等”第二段可以问以下问题来获取写作要点：“What would happened after he got his PhD in literature? Why would he choose literature as his major? What would he do for his future career? And how did it related to his very fir
11、st book?等”参考范文My mothers call returned me to the real world. I suddenly realized something: Books could be incredibly wonderful and I was going to read them. From then on, I kept going to the library more often. In the library, I was exposed to different types of books: detective stories, love stori
12、es, poems, fables and so on. My mother encouraged me to spend time doing my favorite thing. Day by day, I was finally succeed in overcoming my inability to read. Moreover, I began to write some stories by myself. When I went to the university, I chose literature as my major.Last year, my mother was
13、so proud that his son was rewarded a PhD in literature. I never told my mother about my“miraculous” experience that summer. It was the very first book that made me what I am today. This year, I began writing my first book carried the topic of my beagle. I hope it could be my lifelong career. The pow
14、er of the words has held. (174words)范文解析 范文围绕文章的内容进行了合情合理的拓展。第一段写了“我”在母亲的鼓励之下，一直坚持不懈的阅读，在图书馆里接触不同类型的各类书籍，最终完全的克服了阅读障碍，本着对阅读的热爱，“我”在大学将文学作为主修。第二段，我成功获得文学博士学位，并且成为了一名作家，开始了第一本书的写作，而“我”的第一本书正是关于我的猎犬，与上文对我人生产生影响的第一本书交相呼应，符合故事发展的逻辑，升华了主题。提炼归纳 1. 展开充分想象续写有助于培养想象力，但是想象力贵在合理。这个“理”指的就是生活的逻辑性。续写部分不应该游离开头部分，应该
15、是开头部分的顺理成章的发展。如文中第二段所给开头写到Last year, my mother was so proud that his son was rewarded a PhD in literature. 以首句为前提，进行合理的想象，即“我”在毕业之后，开始了我的写作生涯，并且成为了一名作家，这符合文中发展，又充满了丰富的想象，使得文章成为了一个有机的整体。2. 注意前后照应续写要注意前后照应，防止自相矛盾。特别是给出开头的续写，必须要与上文紧密联系，使上下文融为一体。如文章前面提到“我”所读的第一本书对“我”的意义非同小可，所以在续写中，“我”开始了一本书的写作，而第一本书的主题刚
16、好就是关于“我”的曾经养过的猎犬，与前文相互照应。【写作演练】1.阅读下面短文，根据所给情节进行续写，使之构成一个完整的故事。It was 1st January, the first day of the year and a holiday for me. What luck! I decided to withdraw some money from the bank, The bank person, an elderly gentleman with a white beard, replied indifferently as usual to my polite “Happy N
17、ew Year.” He nodded and I sat in front of him.Minutes passed but he didnt raise his head.Then very hesitantly I put my form and booklet in front of him. He was busy filling up entries in his register. After a few minutes he took my form and from his cabinet he took out a very thick file, from which
18、he started filling in my details, I sat there wondering why we had computerized banking if we were still filling in forms and register.After waiting for a few more minutes, in which I showed all signs of being impatient, I asked him if my work was done. The moment I said the words, I felt as if a bo
19、mb had fallen on him. He shouted, “Nothing is done, it will take time!”Just then I saw his morning cup of tea which had been lying there for the last ten minutes, untouched. The tea had tuned almost cold while he was doing his work. Suddenly I felt what this man, who had been working at this counter
20、 for the last God-knows-how-many years, must be feeling when customers like me come who are always in a hurry to get their work done. We do not even feel the need to thank them for being there, He must be feeling so anxious that “here comes another person who will push me for doing his work first.”注
21、意：1. 所续写短文的词数应为150左右；2. 至少使用5个短文中标有下划线的关键词语；3. 续写部分分为两段，每段的开头语已为你写好；4. 续写完成后，请用下划线标出你所使用的关键词语。Paragraph 1:Thinking of this, I told him, “Sir, you please hare your tea, I am not in a hurry.” _Paragraph 2:What he said really touched my heart._2.阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。续写的词数应为150左右。When I
22、spent the last summer with my Grandmother in Warwick, N.Y., she sent me down to the grocery store with a long shopping list. Staring at all the items on the list, I wondered how I could find anything on the packed shelves around me. But she insisted.I walked up to the counter. Behind it was a lady l
23、ike no one Id ever seen. Thick glasses rested on the tip of her nose, gray hair was piled on her head.“Excuse me,” I said. She looked up.“Youre that Clements kid,” she said. “Im Miss Bee. Come closer and let me get a look at you.” She pushed her glasses up her nose. “I want to be able to describe yo
24、u to the policeman if something goes missing from the store.”“Im not a thief!” I was shocked. I was too young to be a thief!“Maybe not, but I can tell youve got potential.” She went back to reading her newspaper.“I need to get these.” I said, holding up my list.“So? Go get them.” She ignored my need
25、 of a favor, “Theres no one here except you and me and Im not your servant, so I suggest you start looking for the things on that list.”The store was a puzzle to a seven-year-old, and it seemed to hold all the goods in the world. I complained about this task Grandma had set me to do while trying to
26、find all the items on my list. It took me one and half an hour to do it, and the mean lady behind the counter didnt even bother to look at me once.I visited Miss Bee a couple of times a week that summer. Sometimes she sold me an old newspaper instead of one that was the latest. Sometimes she overcha
27、rged me and didnt seem embarrassed when I pointed it out. Going to the store was more like going into battle, but I survived. By summers end the shopping trip that had once taken me an hour was done in 15 minutes. The morning I was to return to Brooklyn, I stopped in to get a soda.Para. 1: “All righ
28、t, Miss Potential, what did you learn this summer?” she said._Para. 2: One day after all those years my seven-year-old daughter came to me with homework troubles. _3.阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。续写的词数应为150左右。A funny thing happened to Arthur when he was on the way to work one day. As he walke
29、d along Park Avenue near the First National Bank, he heard the sound of someone trying to start a car. He tried again and again but couldnt get the car moving. Arthur turned and looked inside at the face of a young man who looked worried. Arthur stopped and asked, “It looks like youve got a problem,
30、” Arthur said.Im afraid so. Im in a big hurry and I cant start my car.”“Is there something I can do to help?” Arthur asked. The young man looked at the two suitcases in the back seat and then said, “Thanks. If youre sure it wouldnt be too much trouble, you could help me get these suitcases into a ta
31、xi.”“No trouble at all. Id be glad to help.”The young man got out and took one of the suitcases from the back seat. After placing it on the ground, he turned to get the other one. Just as Arthur picked up the first suitcase and started walking, he heard the long loud noise of an alarm.It was from th
32、e bank. There had been a robbery!Park Avenue had been quiet a moment before. Now the air was filled with the sound of the alarm and the shouts of people running from all directions. Cars stopped and the passengers joined the crowd in front of the bank. People asked each other, “What happened?” But e
33、veryone had a different answer.Arthur, still carrying the suitcase, turned to look at the bank and walked right into the young woman in front of him.She looked at the suitcase and then at him. Arthur was surprised. “Why is she looking at me like that?” He thought. “The suitcase! She thinks Im the ba
34、nk thief!”Arthur looked around at the crowd of people. He became frightened, and without another thought, he started to run.Para 1:As he was running, Arthur heard the young man shouting behind, “Stop, stop!” _Para 2:The taxi stopped in front of the Police Station and Arthur _4.阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写
35、两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。续写的词数应为 150 左右。Sara Savick remembers one special Easter when she was nine years old. Her parents gave her a baby duckling in a yellow basket.“Mom said later that she bought the little duck because she felt sorry for it,” recalled Sara. The people at the pet store colored the feathers
36、pink for Easter. Sara named the duck Pinky.Saras mother really didnt think the baby duck would survive very long. But to her surprise, Pinky grew and got stronger and stronger. Soon, the little duckling was a healthy, hungry duck with white feathers.“We fed Pinky oatmeal, cooked and uncooked, and sm
37、all pieces of vegetables,” said Sara. Pinky lived inside the house with Sara and her family. She specially fancied taking baths with Sara. Everyone treated Pinky as a family member.But just when everything appeared to be perfect, the night of the “talk” came. Saras Mom and Dad sat her down, explaini
38、ng that the best thing for Pinky was to live a normal duck life, with other ducks. It was not natural for ducks to live indoors with a family, her father told her. He added Pinky needed to swim in ponds and do all the same things that ducks in the wild do.Sara started to cry, knowing what was going
39、to happen. Saras parents decided to take Pinky to a park, which was two miles away. There was a pond with a lot of other ducks. Pinky would have the chance to live a natural life and Sara could still visit her.The big day came, Sara and her parents put Pinky in a box and drove to the park. Sara said
40、 that Pinky did not look happy; maybe Pinky was convinced that she was a human, not a duck.注意:所续写短文的词数应为 l50 左右;续写部分分为两段,每段的开头语已为你写好; Paragraph 1Everyone was sad when they left Pinky at the pond, even Saras father._Paragraph 2The next morning, when looking out of the kitchen window, Sara couldnt bel
41、ieve her eyes!_5.阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。续写的词数应为 150 左右。Last year at Christmas time, my wife, three children and I were on our way from Paris to Nice. Somehow everything went wrong. Our hotels were “tourist traps” and our rented car broke down. On Christmas Eve, when we checked into a d
42、irty hotel in Nice, there was no Christmas spirit in our hearts.It was raining and cold when we went out to eat. We found a small restaurant poorly decorated for the holiday. Only five tables in the restaurant were taken. There were two German couples, two French families, and an American sailor, by
43、 himself. They were eating in stony silence except the sailor. He was writing a letter, and a half-smile lighted his face. In the corner a piano player was listlessly (无精打采地) playing Christmas music.All of us were interrupted by an old French flower woman through the front door. She had a worn overc
44、oat and her old shoes were wet. Carrying her basket of flowers, she went from one table to another. No one bought any. Exhausted and frustrated, she sat down at a table.The sailor finished his meal and got up to leave. Putting on his coat, he walked over to the flower womans table.“Merry Christmas,” he said, smiling and picking out a handful of flowers. “How much are they?” “Two francs, sir.”The sailor put a twenty franc note in the womans hand.“I dont have change, sir,” she said. “