1、02 02 家庭成员家庭成员 20212021 年中考英语书面表达高分作文攻略(全国通用版)年中考英语书面表达高分作文攻略(全国通用版) 素材储备与相关话题写作指导素材储备与相关话题写作指导 看到关于家庭成员的话题,首先要确立哪些人属于家庭成员:爸爸(father)、妈妈(mother)、爷爷/外公 (grandfather)、奶奶/外婆(grandmother)、兄弟(brother)、姐妹(sister)。家庭成员都是和作者最亲近的人,般总 是体现亲情。 实践案例实践案例 题目题目 My mother 审题审题 看题目是全命题作文。妈妈是我们最亲近的人,留下最深刻印象的应该是对孩子的关爱和
2、教育,当表 达的中心都差不多的情形下,语言的运用是取胜的关键。 段落结构段落结构 从题目看,my mother,没有修辞词,也就是作者想写妈的任何方面都可以,但这样欧容易主次不分,往 往会进行过多的外根损写。般像这样的写人作文。 可以得两句未要的外貌特征,面更多的是突出妈妈对我 的爱和帮助,可以是泛面谈,也可以通过一件事进行描述,突出妈妈对于我的关爱。 核心词汇核心词汇 描写人物外貌的常用词语 middle-aged 中年的 overweight 超重的 pretty 漂亮的 attractive 迷人的 good-looking 长得好看的 white -haired 白发苍苍的 strai
3、ght 1 curly / long/ short hair 直发/卷发长发/短发 medium height 中等个头 slim 苗条的 handsome 英俊的 ordinary looking 长相一般的 near-sighted 近视的 well-dressed 穿着讲究的 描写人物性格的常用词语 honest 老实的 good-/bad-/quick -tempered 好/坏/急脾气的 hot-tempered 脾气暴躁的 easy -going 好相处的 reliable 值得信任的 energetic 有活力的 generous 大方的 punctual 守时的 stubbor
4、n 固执的 sensitive 敏感的 open-minded 思想开明的,愿意接受他人观点的 hardworking / diligent 努力工作的,勤奋的 strict 严厉的 friendly 友好的 kind / warm-hearted 好心的 reasonable 讲理的 outgoing 外向的 adventurous 敢于冒险的 bad-mannered 无礼的 talented 有天赋的 enthusiastic 热情的 traditional 传统的 naive 天真的 描写人物心情的常用词语 happy ! glad / pleased 高兴的 satisfied 满意
5、的 anxious 焦虑的 eager 急切的 exhausted 精疲力竭的 surprised 1 astonished 惊讶的 sorrowful 悲伤的 难过的 stressed 紧张的 worried 担忧的 curious 好奇的 absent minded 心不在焉的 disgusted 厌恶的 calm 平静的 relaxed 放松的 terrified 恐惧的 核心词组核心词组 go to school 1 work 上学/上班 do morning exercises 做早操 cook delicious food 煮美味的食物 be busy doing sth.忙于做某
6、事 look after / take care of 照顾 be kind to.对.慈爱 used to 过去常常 read newspapers 读报纸 pick up 开车接某人 be full of wisdom 充满智慧 get ready for .为.做准备 be worried about .对.担心 spend time doing sth.在做.上花费时间 参考句型参考句型 . He was born in . on . .出生 e.g. He was born in Shanghai on January 1st, 1982.他于 1982 年 1 月 1 号在上海出生
7、。 . He looks like .他长得. e.g. He looks like a model.他长得像模特。 He is a/an . with .他是.的男子 e.g. He is a handsome man with a strong and tall igure.他是一个身材高大的英俊男子。 He is a/an . who.他是.的男子 e.g. He is a tall man who is hardworking. 他是一个工作努力的高个儿男子。 He is good at .他擅长. e.g. He is good at cooking. 他擅长烧菜。 . cares
8、much about me in my life and study. .在我的生活和学习中非常关心我。e.g. My mother cares much about me in my life and study. 我的妈妈在我的生活和学习中非常关心我。 While I am doing . my .当我正.时我. e.g. While I am playing the piano, my mother always sits beside me. 当我弹琴的时候,我妈妈总是坐在我的边上。 He always . and looks like .是.看上去. e.g. He always a
9、ppears serious and looks like a judge. 他总是很严肃,看上去像-一个法官。 Whenever I talk about my family with others, . is always the one I feel most proudof.当和别人谈论我的家 人时,.总是让我感到最自豪的人。or e.g. Whenever I talk about my family with others, my grandfather is always the oneI feel most proud of. 和别人谈论我的家人时,我的爷爷总是让我感到最自豪的
10、人。 . Since the day I was born, I have been the apple of . eyes,自从我出生以来,.视我为掌上明珠。 e.g. Since the day I was born, I have been the apple of my grandpas eyes.自从我出生以来,爷爷视我为掌上 明珠。 习作习作 My mother The person I have the most interactions with everyday is probably my mom.She is not a very tall person,but she
11、is of the highest; place in my heart.She usually wears her hair up in a bun and she love wearing blue .Thats how I recognize her in a group of people.I go for her whenever i need emotional support, for she is always there for me. She always gives me useful advice. I love her deary, and I am grateful
12、 for everything shes done for her baby girl. 点评点评:文章虽不长,但开门见山点题,接着进行外貌描中的位置最高,讲到母亲把头发盘起来,一个干 练自信的母着,作者说到了母亲在她有困难的时候给予她的帮助。最后语言个性化,符合角色性格特征, 人物刻画得逼真形象。 相关相关话题精彩范文话题精彩范文 (一)(一) A Happy Family My name is Lin Min. I have a happy family. There are three people in my family, father, mother and 1. My fathe
13、r is very tall, who likes to wear suits very much.He is very fond of reading. Even before he goes to bed, he always reads for a while. My mother is a thin lady with long hair. She often makes delicious food for me. | am of medium height with a pair of glasses. I take great interests in insects. I am
14、 very happy when my parents take me to the countryside, because I can observe the insects there. This is my family, a family with lots of happiness. 参考译文参考译文 一个幸福的家 我叫林敏。我有一个幸福的家庭。我家有三口人:爸爸、妈妈和我。 我的爸爸非常高,他很喜欢穿西装。他非常喜欢看书。甚至在他睡觉前,他总会看-会儿书。我的 妈妈瘦瘦的,留着长发。她经常给我做美味的食物。我有着中等身材,戴着一副眼镜。我对昆虫很感兴趣。 当爸爸妈带我去郊外时,我
15、很高兴,因为我可以在那里观察昆虫。 这就是我的家,一个幸福的家。 亮点词汇亮点词汇 be fond of. .喜爱. go to bed 上床睡觉 fora while 一会儿 make delicious food 做好吃的食物 take interests in. .感兴趣 insect 昆虫 observe 观察;注意到 出彩句型出彩句型 There be. . My father. who likes to d.我的爸爸.喜欢做. Even before.he.甚至.在.之前,他. My mother is. with.我的妈妈有.的外表。 This is my family,a fa
16、mily with.这就是我的家庭,一.的家庭。 高分点评高分点评 本文先总说了家庭的组成,然后分别介绍各成员,最后以“幸福的家结尾,层次分明,洋略得当。文中 使用了较为丰富的句式, 如 who 引导的定语从句和 before 引导的时间状语从句, 还有with+名词和be fond of等各种短语。 (二)(二) My Grandmother My grandmother is a kind-hearted person. Whenever people come to her for help, she is always ready to help them out. She is we
17、ll over sixty, but she still runs a garden. She grows all kinds of flowers and plants in her garden. You can always find beautiful flowers there. My grandmother has taken care of me, since I was a little baby. We are like good fiends and spend a lot of happy time together. 1 love my grandmother very
18、 much. Now she is getting old, and | want to look after her in the future. 参考译文参考译文 我的祖母 我的祖母是一个热心肠的人。无论何时人们来找她帮忙,程花园用种了各种各样的花和植物,她已经 60 多岁了,但她还打理着一个花园。我的粗母就开始照质我,我们你总是可以在那里看到漂亮的花朵。从 我还是小婴儿时, 就像好朋友,一起度过 了很多开心的时光。 我非常爱我的祖母。现在她越来越老了,我以后想照顾她。 亮点词汇亮点词汇 kind-hearted.仁慈的,好心肠的 help sb. out 帮助某人解决困难 run a g
19、arden 打理花园 all kinds of 各种各样的 look after 照顾 in the future 在以后;将来 出彩句型出彩句型 Whenever people come to her for help, . 无论何时人们来找她帮忙,. She is always ready to.她总是很乐意. You can always find. there. 你总是可以在那里找到. My grandmother .,since.我的祖母. 自从. We spend a lot of happy time together. 我们一起度过了很多开心的时光。 高分点评高分点评 本文从三
20、个方面-“祖母的热心肠”“爱植物”和“对我的关爱”入手,对祖母的形象进行了生动地刻面。本 文中短语的运用是一大亮点, 如com for help ready torun a garden等.文章处都流靠着作者对祖母的深切 感情,感染力极强,是另一大夺目之处。 中考真题解析中考真题解析 同学们, 在初中三年的英语学习中,我们从课本中学习了有关 “Family”、 “Be polite to sb.”、“Protecting the environment”、 “Volunteering”等话题和功能。假定你是李磊,请参考这些话题和功能,依据以下要点提 示,写一篇题为 “Im Proud of M
21、y Family”的英语短文,向校报投稿,讲述你的家庭故事。 要点提示: 1. 家人相亲相爱,努力学习、工作; 2. 邻里和睦,礼貌待人; 3. 爱护环境,从我做起: 写作要求 l. 词数 90 左有(短文的开头已经给出,不计入总词数) ; 2. 根据要点提示,适当发挥; 3. 短文中不得出现真实的姓名及校名。 参考词汇:Work hard;be friendly to each other;get on well with;protect the environment;be volunteers Im Proud of My Family My name is Li Lei. I have
22、 a happy family. There are four people in my family: my parents, my sister and I. _ _ _ _ _ _ _ 【写作思路写作思路】 这是一篇话题作文,根据材料中的相关信息讲述一下你的家庭故事。所提供的材料中命好了题目:Im Proud of My Family。主要从1、家人相亲相爱,努力学习、工作;2、邻里和睦,礼貌待人;3、爱护环境, 从我做起:这三个方面去介绍。时态为一般现在时,人称为第一人称。注意作文中必须包含材料上的所有 信息,并适当发挥。写作时,避免使用汉语式的英语,尽量使用我们熟悉的句子或短语。语法
23、要正确,表 达要符合英语习惯,注意时态、时间状语的搭配及主谓一致问题。写作中适当使用连词,注意上下文联系 紧密,符合逻辑关系,表达具有条理性。 【参考范文参考范文】 My name is Li Lei. I have a happy family. There are four people in my family: my parents, my sister and I. My families love each other. (My parents love us and we love our parents.) My parents both work hard. My siste
24、r and I study hard at school, too. My families are kind and friendly to our neighbors. We are all polite to each other. We get on well with each other. My families try our best to protect the environment in our daily life. My mom and my sister usually bring a bag to go shopping. My father is used to
25、 taking the bus to work. I never order takeaway food. My families are glad to be volunteers at any time. My parents often help the children in poor areas. (My sister helps in the school library twice a week.) Sometimes I read newspapers to the old people. What a happy family! Im proud of my family!
26、【名师点评】【名师点评】 【高分句型一】 My families try our best to protect the environment in our daily life. 我的家人尽力保护我们日常生活中的 环境。该句话运用了:try ones best to do sth. 尽力做某事。protect the environment:保护环境。 【高分句型二】 My father is used to taking the bus to work. 我父亲习惯乘公共汽车上班。这句话运用了:be used to doing sth. 习惯于做某事。 总之,本文运用了大量的简单句,虽然
27、没有复合句,但是这写简单句把作者的一家人的生活描写的入 情入理,就像是发生在我们的眼前一样。 满分作文必背满分作文必背 一一 I want to say thank you to my father Ive developed a strong bond with my dad since I was little.He lets me see things in my way and then gives me his view points. He has always been supportive for all the decisions I make. What I love an
28、d appreciate him is his patience his manner to listen to others and take them into consideration and his inner strength. I am so lucky to have the best father in the world as I know he would sacrifice everything for me. He is an excellent father. I love him so much. I want to say thank you to my fat
29、her, 二 My unusual grandfather My grandpa is an interesting person. He is easy. going and looks a little chubby. I love him very much. He is fond of all kinds of TV dramas. But now he has a favorite one. He is a big fan of the latest drama In the Name of the People. He shows his passion in his own wa
30、y: every time I visit him, he always tells me things in this drama and tries very hard to help me understand them. Although he has a strange taste, he is still my great grandpa. He always gives me useful advice when I have problems. In order to let me know his advice well, he will tell me some very
31、old stories of himself. When I make some progress, he will tell me not to showoff He also teaches me to do some cooking in my spare time. He is very good at cooking and the dishes he makes, in my opinion,are even better than those in big restaurants! This is my unusual grandpa.We laugh together, rea
32、d together and learn together. He is the best grandpa in the world. I will never let him down! 三 The person I admire most is my father The person I admire most is my father. Although he isnt very tall, he always leaves people an image of a good man with his thoughtfulness. He is very helpful and is
33、always ready to help others. One day, a boy who is one of our neighbors injured his leg carelessly.My father took him to the hospital immediately and paid the fees with his own savings. In addition, he works hard and tries his best to make our life better. He sets a good example tome.I think he is not only a good father but also a good teacher in my life.