1、第二节第二节 提升作文档次的技法提升作文档次的技法让文章靓丽起来让文章靓丽起来 技法(一) 词汇高级，“语”众不同 在英语书面表达阅卷过程中，老师会对一些“高级”词汇偏爱有加。但是，大多数同学 可能没有高级词汇的意识，提到“好”，就只会想到“good”，提到“坏”，就只会想到 “bad”。 那么，什么样的词汇最能够吸引阅卷老师的眼球？什么样的词汇才算是高级词汇呢？我 们可以采用以下原则： 什么样的词汇 1标新立异，晚词优先 老师偏爱学得比较晚的单词，新学的单词，可以体现学生具备“学以致用”的意识。如 果某个单词既可以用初中的词汇来表达，又可以用高中的词汇来表达，那么要尽量选择用高 中的，如：
2、01 adj.美丽的 索然无味低分词：beautiful 吸人眼球高分词： appealing 有吸引力的； attractive 吸引人的； charming 迷人的； fascinating 迷 人的 高考范文例句： First，nothing is more attractive than a proper and realistic picture.(2015 上海，书面表达) In addition，it is a fabulous choice to visit some famous scenic spots such as Mount Tai during the vacati
3、on，in order to enjoy appealing scenery and make more friends.(2013 山东，书面表达) 02 adj.困难的 索然无味低分词：difficult 吸人眼球高分词：challenging 有挑战性的 高考范文例句： In the coming three years，our school life will be challenging.(2014 江西，书面表达) 03 adj.重要的 索然无味低分词：important 吸人眼球高分词：vital 至关重要的；essential 必不可少的；significant 有重要意义的
4、高考范文例句： Whats worse，some drivers，cyclists and pedestrians do not think it vital to obey traffic rules. (2015 江苏，书面表达) To avoid such conflicts，we should be kind to one another，which is essential to enjoying a harmonious life.(2012 江苏，书面表达) 2短语/词块优先 在阅卷老师看来，活用短语能够体现一个考生的语言运用能力。因此，我们可以将某些常见 单词转化为短语/词块，
5、如： 01 v.参加 索然无味低分词：join 吸人眼球高分词：take part in；participate in 高考范文例句： Finally，we should take part in sports and outdoor activities frequently.(2014 安徽，书面表达) I know that you welcome students from different countries and Id like to take part in it. (2012 全国，书面表达) It returned to the Games in 1932， and wo
6、men were first allowed to participate in the competition in 1968.(2008 广东，书面表达) 02 v.使用 索然无味低分词：use 吸人眼球高分词：make good use of 高考范文例句： My experience tells me that it is not what you are given but how you make use of it that determines who you are.(2012 湖北，书面表达) Last but not least， its everyones respon
7、sibility to make good use of water， such as recycling and saving water in our daily life.(2010 福建，书面表达) 03 v.拜访 索然无味低分词：visit 吸人眼球高分词：pay a visit to 高考范文例句： Your students visiting group coming from the US will pay a visit to our school on June 26. (2011 天津，书面表达) 04 某些形容词of同根名词 索然无味低分词：very important
8、 重要的；very difficult 困难的；very beautiful 美丽的；very useful 有用的；very helpful 有帮助的；very harmful 有害的；very valuable 有价值的；very significant 至关重要的；very necessary 必要的 吸人眼球高分词(对应)：of great importance；of great difficulty；of great beauty；of great use； of great help；of great harm；of great value；of great significanc
9、e；of great necessity 高考范文例句： Undoubtedly，it will be of great value to every student in our class.(2015 广东，书面表达) Firstly，a sponsorship will be of great help.(2013 重庆，书面表达) I think the chance is of great importance for me.(2011 山东，书面表达) 技法(二) 句式丰富，彰显能力 高考时，一篇书面表达中的句子如果都采用简单句，肯定不能得高分，精彩句式的合理 使用会使文章读起来抑
10、扬顿挫。 因此应多使用一些高级句式和复合句， 让句子“高人一筹”， 亮点纷呈，彰显考生的写作能力。 1精彩的复合句 a增加亮点的定语从句 For example，there are huge amounts of reference books.I am often confused to choose from them. For example，there are huge amounts of reference books from which I am often confused to choose. Paper- cutting is a traditional art form
11、 in China.It has a history of more than 1,500 years. Paper- cutting is a traditional art form in China，which has a history of more than 1,500 years. b吸引眼球的状语从句 Since you have long been interested in Chinese culture(原因状语从句)，I think Beijing Language and Culture University is an ideal place for you. If
12、 youre interested in the Chinese folk art(条件状语从句)，please e- mail me. We can set out early so that we will have more time to read and select books(目的状语从句) c提升档次的名词性从句 It is worth mentioning that our volleyball team won the championship twice in the national middle school volleyball match(主语从句) I hope
13、 these suggestions would be helpful to you(宾语从句) Thats why I think the trip along the Yangtze River is a better choice(表语从句) 2亮眼的倒装句 So diligent are you that Im more than delighted to teach you. 3新颖的强调句和省略句 It is the spirit that the story conveys that really matters. As scheduled，an art exhibition w
14、ill be held next Sunday in the local museum. 4传神的被动结构 Your timely help will be very much appreciated by me. 5言简意赅的非谓语动词结构 To get admitted，I have made good preparations，trying to know as much as I could about my city. 6委婉的虚拟语气 Without your kindness and generosity，I would not have enjoyed myself so mu
15、ch when visiting England. 技法(三) 连贯衔接，巧妙过渡 连接(过渡)性词语的使用是语言连贯性得以实现的最常用手段。在句与句之间，段与段 之间恰当地使用一些承上启下的连接(过渡)性词语是非常必要的。过渡词语就像纽带一样把 文章紧密地连接起来，更像润滑剂，使文章衔接流畅。 1表示起始关系的过渡性词语 above all， first of all， to begin with， according to， as you know/as is known， as is shown.， when it comes to 等。 First of all，I think it
16、important to make more friends abroad. As is shown in the picture， a tree is knocked down by the strong wind， while the grass stays as it is. 2表示时间顺序的过渡性词语 first(ly)，second(ly)，third(ly)，then，later，in the end，finally，at last，after that，afterwards， since then，meanwhile 等。 Secondly，we should get up ea
17、rly to memorize idioms and useful expressions. Meanwhile，we all enjoyed the beauty of nature. I had a bad cold last week.First， I had a running nose， but I did not take it seriously.Then I began to cough. After that，I had a fever and felt weak.Finally，I was sent to hospital and had to lie in bed for
18、 three days. 3表示并列关系的过渡性词语 and，or，also，as well as，neither.nor.，not only.but also.，either.or.，not.but.等。 Work hard，and you will be admitted to a key university. Swimming not only benefits our health，but also helps us have a strong will. 4表示转折/对比关系的过渡性词语 but，yet，however，while，otherwise，on the contrary
19、 等。 However，not until the match was over did we realize that we became the loser. On the contrary，smart phones not only take up our valuable time，but also do great harm to our health. 5表示因果关系的过渡性词语 because，as，since，for，thanks to，due to，as a result of，so，therefore，as a result/consequence 等。 Thanks to
20、 the doctors timely treatment，he was saved. Therefore，I suggest we should be given more time for sports and sleep. 6表示条件关系的过渡性词语 if，unless，in case (of)，as/so long as，on condition that 等。 I would be very grateful if you can meet him at the airport. As long as you dont lose heart，youre sure to succeed
21、. 7表示递进关系的过渡性词语 besides，in addition，whats more，furthermore，more- over，whats worse，still less(更不用 说)，to make matters worse，worse still，on (the) one hand.，on the other (hand)，for one thing.for another.等。 In addition，we shouldnt neglect that everyone wants a friendly and peaceful society. On the other
22、hand，online shopping also has many disadvantages. 8表示列举事实的过渡性词语 such as，for example/instance，take.for example，that is to say，as follows，in other words 等。 Take Beijing for example，it is one of the oldest cities in the world. That is to say，if you want to succeed，you have to believe in yourself. 9表示观点
23、的过渡性词语 in my opinion，in my view，in my point of view，as far as I am concerned，as for me，personally (speaking)，I think.等。 In my opinion，people shall not smoke in public places. 10表示总结的过渡性词语 in short，in brief，in conclusion，in a/one word，to sum up，all in all，on the whole，in general， generally speaking 等
24、。 In a word，success is important，and so is failure，because its the mother of success. All in all， travelling is the best choice to recharge ourselves and get ready for the new challenges. .按要求对下列句子进行扩充 1每天要努力学习，为每一次考试做出仔细的计划。(增加条件状语) Study hard every day and make careful plans for every exam.If we a
25、re prepared，we will not feel worried. 2复旦大学位于上海。(增加 which 引导的非限制性定语从句) Fudan University is located in Shanghai，which is an international city where I can get a lot of knowledge and experience. 3不管我将面对什么样的困难，我都不会屈服。(增加目的状语) To realize my dream，whatever challenge I will face，I will never give in. 4我们应
26、该学会如何与他人相处。(增加具体信息说明) We should learn how to get along well with others.For example， we should respect our teachers and be friendly to our classmates. 5一些学生非常担心考试以至于晚上无法入睡。(增加结果状语) Some students are so worried about exams that they cant fall asleep at night.As a result， they feel sleepy in the dayti
27、me and cant concentrate in class. .按要求完成下列句子 6It shows that hard work and determination play a vital role in shaping a great mind.(改为强调句式) It shows that its hard work and determination that play a vital role in shaping a great mind. 7My teacher thinks I am excellent and that I can do well in my stud
28、y.It makes me more confident.(合并为一个句子) My teacher thinks I am excellent and that I can do well in my study，which makes me more confident. 8 His father is paving the way for him while his mother is holding his jacket behind him， and there is sweat on her face.(使用 with 复合结构) His father is paving the w
29、ay for him while his mother is holding his jacket behind him，with sweat on her face. 9They not only offer you joy and excitement，but also encourage you to think critically.(改为倒 装句) Not only do they offer you joy and excitement，but also they encourage you to think critically. 10Shall we go picnicking
30、 tomorrow? It depends on the weather.(合并为名词性从句) Whether we will go picnicking tomorrow or not depends on the weather. .使用高级句式转化下列句子 11Above all，we must do something to stop pollution.(使用被动语态) Above all，something must be done to stop pollution. 12Because I was ill that day，I didnt take part in the sp
31、orts meeting.(使用虚拟语气) If I hadnt been ill that day，I would have taken part in the sports meeting. 13We had a good time with the peasants that day.(使用感叹句) What a good time we had with the peasants that day! 14If it isnt well organized，the meeting will be a failure.(使用省略句) If not well organized，the meeting will be a failure. 15 The whole class heard this and burst into laughter and my deskmates face turned red.(使用非 谓语动词) Hearing this，the whole class burst into laughter and my deskmates face turned red.